Hehe, cute. I actually had to take short breaks a few times while reading to stop laughing. I'm not sure why, seeing as I'm the only one home, but whatever. Very funny. Took me a fairly long time to read, but definitely worth the wait. Too bad my fanfiction muse is still on vacation, I could probably write some good stuff about things I saw while I was in China...

-Kiki

Awesome!
This was a great story, I really liked it. :D
<3

I think that you're amazing.

By the length of this oneshot, I nearly thought I would die trying to read it (but alas I am stubborn and will NOT succumb to Morpheus' sweet embrace even after four days of tiring convention going) or begin to cry if it was going to be one of those long, sad oneshots.

Thankfully it was none of those, and I was laughing happily by the end of it. It's funny what a glance can do - it reunited an old friend of mine and I which led to my first relationship with his sister which led to my meeting my friends of today which is leading to the path I still walk. How interesting.
Anyways, I like those coincidences. When I read the "emo kid" part, I was like "is that Zexion?! Oh please let it be him!" and it was! Yay!

Awesome story!! xD Really cute and funny! Great job!! ;)

I'm not so sure you should start counting your oneshots as oneshots any more, if you've jumped from having less than 3,0 to more than 8,0 words for regular length. This is more like a mini-epic rather than a dinky oneshot.

Firstly, you deserve a 'thank you' for this mini-epic, sentimentality and all that crap with it. Of all the small presents I got for my birthday, I like this the most. 13,0 words of incredible writing will always mean more to me than a gift card or a flashy, hot-pink top for my birthday.

Of course, now would be a good time to cut the appreciation short and get on with the actual reviewing.

I've always liked how you're able to have incredibly original ideas for a pairing that's pretty much had every idea written with it, popular as it is. Poster boy... interesting choice, at least. I'm not sure if I like Poster Boy!Axel, or Baker!Axel more, though. I like the parallel, at the very least.

I don't want to be sentimental or anything (again), but I don't think I have a favourite part of this. The tie between the beginning and the end is really clever, and the way you write Axel in first person is very precise, what with the small amount of wit, ramble and 'energy' in the words.

You write him like you speak, at any point.

Another thing I really liked was how everything wasn't written directly, but made to be translated and applied by the reader. The Zemyx implication towards the end and Axel's attitude towards Roxas before he even properly met him were some examples, and I enjoyed how everything you wrote didn't have to be explained directly, but just gleaned from reading it.

There's a lot to say about this and not quite enough words to express it, even with the ridiculous character limit FF gives to review. I wouldn't want to ramble any more than I already am, anyway, so I'll leave the actual review at that.


It seems that, in my lack of reviewing you story by story, you've even found yourself some new critique-ers to take my place. Very nitpicky on your grammar and occasional mistakes... I hope I was never that bad whenever I decided to mention something like that.

I'm ashamed, though. You've written me two different stories for my last two birthdays and however many dedications and chapter dedications, and I still have yet to get past two minutes on that MakeDamnSure video I promised you last year, and then for your birthday. I'll even be lucky if I can manage to finish it by the end of this decade, it's looking to be.

I guess now's the time to take that silly idea I had last night and actually try to make up some of the debt I have with you. I'm not even sure if I owe you more lives or you owe me more, at this point.

It had better be your side, at least. You owe me in the tens of thousands, now, and that's more than a few.

But, one more thing before I end this review, which is hopefully long enough to match your mini-epic.

If this reads like a bad essay, then you can just blame it on being sick and not sleeping well, once again. I'd love to be more witty and all, maybe throw in some snarky lame references and all, but all I can really say is thanks for writing such an awesome mini-epic. Oh, and...

Axel is lame.

That is all.

I really liked this! It was different. I'm now going to go look at all your other stuff, so tata!

this was so awesome!
roxas' so cute XD
LOL demmy! he's so clumsy!!
<33

loved it

XD <- thats the face im making right now! XD XD XD XD!

love.love.love.

"Most of the time, which was quite often actually, although it was never really done on purpose, I’d forget about Roxas entirely, forget that I actually have a room-mate now, and try and go into the bathroom for a shower without first checking if it was occupied, not that I had needed to before I even had somebody living with me.

…Well, who knew he had such a good aim and throw? Not to mention a pretty sweet form."

this scene kinda reminded me of Ontruim La Vida. :)

I loved this...please continue your amazing righting.

Hey! It was my birthday last Monday!O: I turned 16!! woot.
Maybe you should right me a lil' sumthin sumthin. ;D
lols.

This was amazingly adorable.

Nice work!!:)

Some of the grammar was off, but I still love this story. I was itching to recommend it to a couple of friends before I'd even finished it. It's that good. It's got a cute plot and I love how you tied the beginning and the epilogue together.

Well. That was... definitely enough to distract me from writing. Holy crap. How did you WRITE so much!? I mean, when I saw the word count on the fic list I was like "Well, this will be interesting." And then I actually read it and I decided that you are a freak and a god and a writing maniac from writing all that.

My. God.

Right. Finished freaking out now. In any case, that was a great story! I really loved reading it. I shall be going through the rest of your stories now. Buh-bye!

yeah this was long. so i read it slowly, and tried to find where i left off. eventually i finished it though! yay! aw, they got together after slowly becoming friends and than becoming lovers! axel thought roxy was going to steal his position? i wouldve thought the same thing! thanks for the fic! i enjoyed readingit!QQ

I LOVE IT. OMG YAY. They're DESTINED i tell you XD the word count didn't scare me. It totally made me read this ficc XD YAY AWESOME JOBB!

I LOVE your long stories so much xD So length never scares me away lol.

For some reason, when Axel saw Roxas hanging out with an 'emo looking boy', I was like "Who? Riku? Can't be because the guy's suppose to be the same height as Roxas..."
God I can be so clueless sometimes.

Haha, Axel thought that he was going to replaced. I mean, that's a pretty logical thing to think but I thought it was funny how bad he was treating Roxas because of a misunderstanding.

Ending was cute =) Nice work!