Cool ending. I like the lightheartedness of it. Kind of needed it after all the serious stuff.

I really don't mind what you call shortnes of the chapter. I tend not to favor long chapters. But it was still great.

wow on the demon, I am hoping to see more of those later on, and the pictures...those are interesting, dana must be holding back something else from alice that she knows? right? excellent update! thanks!

I have no words... WHAT A TWIST! :-O And what an idea! You are a genius! And that's it! I can't wait to read more... the last chap I expect?


thx, HW

First of all, I will accuse you of taking me focus away from my homework due to your fabulous story.

This story isn't even finished and I must admit it is an ambitious read and an even more ambitious write. I am enjoying it so far very much. The philosophy of the witches about the universe and energy, I enjoy very much.

There are a lot of fabulous dynamics in your story, particularly with your characters. There are so many different extremes in personality that you manage to make work together. The personal histories of everybody and the way you make them intertwine is fascinating. Sometimes, particularly with the culture differences, there back story is somewhat perverse. But that is refreshing in a kind of intellectual way.

Your knowledge about many subjects lends itself well to this story. The anatomy of an ear, old techniques of taking pictures and developing film, European mythologies and culture, and philosophy - not many people would be able to combine all of these things in a story and still make it enjoyable.

Eric, as sweet as he is, seems remarkably daft. I did enjoy the backstory of the twins and his brief affair with one of the sisters.

Overthrowing the Volturri. Epic plot. Epic story.

oh, what do they have planned for the vampires? is something bad going to happen? great update!! the story of the twins, is really sad...

Wow. That was long and jam-packed with backstory. I do like learning about how the twins came to be vampires. Sad. Glad to know that Dana has some limits.

No a cliffy! :-(
BUT an excellent chap, we learned so much and I couldn't stop 'drinking in the words'... SO exciting!
Ooh, I loved the backstory of the twins and Eric and Gods, I want to learn more about the witches, I like even Madeiline!

Can't wait to read more! :)

Geez, I had no idea Marsaid could do that. To take out Jane's eyes...Ew. And that was an impressive threat from Jane, I have to admit.

I have very little sympathy for Dana. Sure, she's a victim of unreciprocated love and all, but her treatment of Eric is terrible. I think she could give Jane a run for her money in terms of sadistic cruelty. But Edward's plea for her to stop with the memories of her and her 'intro to womanhood' was funny.

Anyway, great chapter. Took awhile getting here though. Oh well. There's a price for good quality stories.

excellent update! I really love your story! okay so without her eyes jane is truly useless right? it is funny how that worked out isn't it! great story!

wonderfully detailed as always! excellent!

This is an incredible storyline and extremely well written. It's more like a novel than a short. Can't wait to see how eveything plays out especially for our favorite vampire family. Thanks for a magnificent read.

Oh, yay! A new chap!
I'm delighted to read about the Cullens a bit more! :) I love the relationship between Alice and Jasper, it's so natural and uncomplicated...they belong together.
Like Finn and Marsaid... I love that couple, you write them very well!
I can't wait to read more (and more, and more...).

Thanks for the update!

HW

I liked that ending scene. It was sweet.

Now, I don't completely understand why Marsaid is staying inn the Cullens' uld you explain it? Does it have somethng to do with restoring the Cullens' memories of their time on the mountain?

Seems like a slow chapter in terms of action. I'd like to see what the Volturi is up to in Italy.

I am sorry to leave such a short review, but I am pressed for time, so I will try to be brief and to the point.

I liked the chapter overall, but there seem to be one too many characters for my taste, and it makes it hard for me too keep up with all of the names and such. I love all of the creativity and the diversity of the characters, especially the witches, but forty of them all together is too much for me to comprehend, although you do the customs and culture of each nicely.

Also loved the part with the cross at the end - leaves one to wonder, did Brighd turn Jesus, or did she just save the cross as a souvenir?

Wonderful writing, as usual.

I'm affraid I won't be too constructive.. :)
I liked this chap too, Jasper (and you) never fails to amaze me. I love, love, love the witches, Marsaid in particulalry and I'm in love with Finn. :D
I love the tiny moment between the Cullens (between Rose and Alice), I can't wait tpo read the next chap, when Marsaid visits them. I would be thrilled if you would include even more simple Cullen moments, because you write them so in character and they are so amusing! :)
Oh and now I'm excited to read about Volterra and the Guard...
Nice chap, thanks.


HW

PS: And thanks for the recomendations! I read some of them and was impressed! If you are interested I too found a bunch of good Twilight fics here, feel free to check them out, they are among my favs! :)