Ah, so it's a oneshot.

Unsatisfying and a little predictable, but somehow enjoyable.

Looking forward to read more fanfics you made.

I like it! good luck on your upcoming stories!

Okay. You got Elena's attitude alright, as well as Patty's and Mattie's.

No spelling errors or what. It's just the way you narrated things. You focused on the way the characters reacted, but sometimes it's better to let their conversations do the talking. Show the readers, don't tell them what's happening.