good chapter I can't wait to see what happens next and... SANDY THE DREAM MEANS SOMETHING! *sorry my spidy senses are tiggling*

That's very cruel, leaving us with such a cliffhanger. I'm really curious about what's going to happen next (who isn't?).
Amazingly written chapter, as always.

I must apologize again for being late with my review. Usually like to read it right after you publish it, but I've been tired lately and went to bed early. But as I say, better late than never. Although I was wondering if I was gonna get to read it today. almost wouldn't let me, every time I clicked on this chapter it kept redirecting me to some other site...weird. Oh well, on with the review.

I always enjoy when you put in little jabs at things with the game itself. I caught two of them in this chapter. One of course being that the guards aren't very bright and wouldn't notice if a scholar was armed to the teeth. The other of course was about swimming. Which of course...Altair can't, he sinks like a lead weight. He didn't seem to enjoy the idea at all when Sandy mentioned it, pretty much shut her down quick. I found both of those amusing.

The scene with Sandy and Altair eating lunch also was amusing. Speaking as a man who also really enjoys cheese, I can understand why Altair would do that. Hopefully his punishment won't be too severe. XD

The description of the battle's aftermath did paint a very vivid, and grim picture of the horrors of war. There weren't nearly as many rules and guidelines regarding war like there are now...and it was often indeed a very gruesome site.

And then of course is the cliffhanger ending. Of which I can only think of two...not even words to describe that situation. Uh-oh. I can imagine the next chapter could be pretty intense depending on what Ol' Rob has to say.

Well as always looking forward to the next chapter. Keep up the good work! ^_^

AHH! EVIL CLIFFHANGER IS EVIL.

“Stop right there, Assassins.” I can just hear Robert's voice saying that in that French accent of his. 8|

Amazing. You are a great writer.

OMFG! THIS IS AWSOME >_< Great job with describing Altair. I like Sandy too! She's so cool ^_^

I'm speechless.

The way you explain things and change point of views, its something I've come to respect. It seems you know your history (or I'm the ignorant one here) you've done your research very well, I'm impressed. I can't give you any tips of improvement, what is there to improve? The chapters length are quite long, but it never bores me down, ever. It's like you've cast a spell on me. Oh Dear, I'm rambling now, but's inevitable, your writing is simply to good to be true.

I'm looking forward to the next chapter, I bet its going to be amazing, as the rest.

Awesome job! I like how you show things from different points of view. It helps me understand them better. It was also a bit sad when Altair seemed as though he thought he were being rejected as a friend at the begining of the chapter. I can't wait for the next chapter!

As other reviewers have stated you shouldn’t be surprised by the large population that Chaos Theory has generated. Your character is complex, relatable and interesting, and her interactions with the noncanon charcters arereal. It’s refreshing to find such a well adapted story on the board! In regards to lateness, I thought you’d mentioned last week that this chapter would be posted on the Saturday night, so I think you’re fine. I think you’ll find anyways that people really appreciate you posting regularly – again it’s a nice change!

On to the story! I was glad to see everything come back together and not in a mushy way either. My word but didn’t the chapter start with some intensity! When Altair cornered her between the wall and himself I had absolutely no idea what was going to happen next. I also loved that in terms of Altair losing his temper; it seems that Sandy is the only one that can provoke such a reaction from him, whether it is indirectly or directly done.

I liked that you could argue that Altair is now fighting only for her. This time when he is angry with Antonio, it’s not over what was said about Kaddar, but what ‘lies he fed Sandy’, which I thought was interesting because it would seem that Altair is if not realizing his feelings, at least becoming more aware/more protective of Sandy. It was interesting contrast with one of his last lines where he says something like: “I’m not your keeper” while earlier on he’d thought that “Antonio had won the battle but he’d never win the war” – I’d figured this war and battle had been over Sandy’s affections. Is it possible that Altair is to some degree possessive of her? I’m not meaning in a creepy stalker kind of way haha, but jealous lover/suitor?

When Antonio and Sandy were talking and he cupped her chin and kissed her forehead I thought for sure that Altair would presume the worst and slaughter Antonio haha. Also well done on Sandy deflecting Antonio’s complements and what not – I thought that seemed very true to character.

The only thing I was rather unclear on was the reconciliation itself. The transition of emotions happened quite quickly and I found myself lost between the moment Sandy had her light bulb realization and told Altair about his basilisk eyes. I’m not sure if it’s just me, maybe I’m missing something important, but didn’t quite get where everything got cleared up.

I also noticed you might want to watch out for repetitive words like in this part: “Suddenly she understood that truly Altair was justified in what he had done, Tony had truly opened mouth and inserted foot with his reckless words. “That just proves he cares. If he was truly cold, he wouldn’t have gotten angry.” You use the word ‘truly’ quite a bit. It’s not a huge deal, just a small thing I noticed and thought I’d bring to your attention :)

I love your mention of the smaller characters like Miriam with the sleeping chemise, and then Faisal talking to the other boys. I figured he was probably spreading the word about Sandy killing the Templar? And the line where Sandy mentions her friend from her own time was awesome. It’s snippets like that that make me hopeful that you’ll consider doing a sequal future fic, I think you’d do it well!! Haha but you don’t have to :P.

Can’t wait for the next chapter and as always well done and keep up the good work!!
--Periodic

you shouldn't be, you got a lot of skill as a writer and your characters pop off the page props to you sir, props to you!
cannot wait for next chpter *stares at computer Why WONT YOU UPDATE!?

Well first off I wanna say sorry for being a day late on this, but as you know I've been sick and when that happens it just destroys me. But at least I had no trouble getting to it today. Secondly, congratulations on the new record! May you break many more. ^_^

Well its good that things came to a somewhat peaceful resolution, kind of. Tensions are still pretty high between Altair and Antonio, but what can you expect really? The part were they ran into each other was a little intense. Even I could feel that it would have been an awkward situation.

Al Mualim at least was somewhat merciful in this situation, and decided to let all three of them slide. As long as it never again happens. Sandy still hasn't gotten over her fear of him it seems. Well I dunno if I'd call it fear, but its definitely a nervousness, and I suppose there is good reason given his position.

Well, at least he had another reason for calling Altair there than just to berate him. Looks like it's time for another one of the nine (well, eight now) to die. That should be fun.

Well as always looking forward to the next chapter, keep up the good work and congrats again! ^_^

You shouldn't be awed by the great response of your story! It is truly awesome and one of the few multi-chaptered AC fics on here by people who know how to write and how to stick with the game's characters while still managing to make them grow to your story AND you research culture and history! Only a handful of fanfic authors do that (heck, some published authors don't do that!).

You and your story are awesome. Simple as that.

And you think posting the chapter up a day late is incredibly late? You're insane! You keep up with weekly updates, something also terribly rare on this site. So pat yourself on the back! Besides, though sometimes it may seem it with your cliff hangers, and extra day or two won't kill anyone.

Anyway, I think this chapter turned out better than your recent ones grammar-ish-wise (because that's totally a word). Didn't see as many missing or repeating words or little typos. But again, little things like that are really not bad as long as they're not littering the story (which they're not) so you're fine! Sometimes I have trouble keeping up with the drama and thoughts and emotions of all the characters, but I think that's good because people can usually never keep up with those in real life either and it makes the reader think more. And I think though it still had the base ideas used in soap operas, this chapter still turned out nice and did show a genuine misunderstanding-- and complicated love/relationship problems which are even more complicated with time traveling and assassins.

What's funny is that I can't figure out who to root for or what I want to happen to Sandy. Well, it's always fun to torture characters anyway, but I feel like I don't really have a specific way I want Sandy to go or turn out, I just have loads of fun going through the situation with her. I dunno, I'm not explaining it right, but basically you're doing a great job at making me love all the characters and situations while also disliking them when needed. Or maybe I'm just weird like that.

And I like how you make Sandy nervous around Al Mualim (assuming you're not secretly changing the Master on us since I'm now not sure you ever actually said his name) but still trying to say what needs to be said and try not to look weak. I think he'd be a guy that can be easily feared or at least be nervous around, and it would just be wrong if Sandy didn't feel like that. And the healthy fear you occasionally instill in her of Altair (and keeping in mind they're assassins). It's all very real.

So yes. Awesome job, as usual. Congrats on the great hits too! Hope you did well on your quiz and essay, and good luck with the rest of your course work!

~Hedwig

I was waiting for this chapter all week! You should of seen me checking my email for the story alert almost every half hour. (Kinda scary, I know.)

But I just love how you resolved all this drama without making it a soap opera, although that would have been very interesting. I can still feel some lingering tension however. Great job!

I will be looking forward to your next update.

I'm looking forward to your next chapters. Great story!

Don't leave me hanging! You must do more! I must know what Altair will do to her! Hurry up and do something please! *sqeals as I look at the end again*