wo ho! Neal can go back to Kel! I'm so glad :)

I think the Rachelle/Cleon side plot is just a little too much... I'd rather this fic be centered on kel and neal... it's interesting though!

please update soon!

yay thanx for up dateing lol it was a good chapter ;))

still doing a good job cant wait for the next chapter

nice i like that you have gorge in the story even if its only for a split second lmao still doing a good job ;))

wow that was an amazing ending for that chapter great job lol

its so sad but your doing a good job

Wow... a lot happened in this chapter-- Raoul and Tobe came, Cleon died, Owen had a dream. I am really moved by Owen's behavior during this story. He is the same Owen at heart, that bumbling, carefree little guy, but you can really see that he has matured. The way he really cares for her, as he always has, and will sacrifice so much to see her, really touches me.
I'm still not sure about Cleon's death though. You really changed his character, adding more depth in the process, making me feel really bad for his situation, yet disappointed that he was so cold that he couldn't give up his mere honor to see her. But then, I dread what would have happened if he had pursued her.
I really like Tobe, too. You can see that his character has changed, but in a way that is natural for a boy when he grows older-- he has aged. The way he thinks about Kel is very real to me, and, like Owen, it is touching.
I love the way Kel and Neal interact, how they are both different from the books, but different in a realistic way. Neal is so appropriate, as he isn't beforehand, and it really displays that he deeply cares for her, yet isn't in love with her (or IS he?).
Thank you so much! I love your story!

Again, amazing. When I say the story is depressing, I mean it in a good way. I really feel for the characters, the story... I dread the outcome. I really feel like this is the real story. I wish Dom hasn't died, almost as if he were a real person... I am hindered, my eyes watering, as I read your tragic stylings.
Why I really like this chapter? CLEON! I never really liked him, but his story really makes me feel sorry for him, and shows his vulnerability. He was always a 2D character, I felt, but you really have made him a person, like you have with all of the characters.
Please read my story, Lady Keladry, though I just started. I want to know what you think of it! It's also a Dom/Kel story, but slowly done, with time for all of the characters, written in the format of a real book, I hope.
By the way, you're still doing that "must of", "should of" thing.
THANKS!

Wow, besides a few gramatical mistakes, your story is amazing. At first, I thought that your idea wouldn't work, considering Kel's previous behavior, but reading this, you really found your way around it. And I really like Neal's behavior, the way he comforted her. You are a true sower of sorrow (no offense)! The sorrow, the pain... it all seems so real, so intense! I have tears in my eyes whilst I read this. Forgive me for saying so, but I almost think it's done better then when Kel returned to Haven and found it destroyed... this is the kind of impact I was looking for!
And one thing: you always write must of, when you should write must have... just pointing that out, and the same with should have, too.

nice cliff hangers :))

holy ** holy ** you made kel prgo?!?! no freaking way now i gotta read to see what happens ;p

lol good prologue it really caught me lol

by both I'm assuming that the second man was Neal right? And is Cleon that low that he would take a village girl as his mistress?

please update soon!

aw... that is so sad... I almost thought you were going to have them confess love to each other in that scene... but it would be much too early... :)

please update soon!

I'm lost... what did Owen dream about? and what was in his letter that would make people feel a sense of impending doom...?

And why would Neal be a traitor? Dunno, seems a but weird...

Can't wait for more though!