Simply put, this story was both beautiful and well thought of, I'm truly glad to have read it and I wouldn't have changed a thing! It was the living definition of a true family story! Great Job and Thank You for making this Amazing Work! )

Thank u 4 the story.. Its entertainin indeed...

OW! I... I... I'm just muted! Clever, clever. And very cute too of course! Really well done.

I mean, this is so romantic, and I haven't read the whole story!

Totally one of the best FICS i have read in my entire life!

Well done. I enjoyed this story a lot. I was very pleased with it and the twists and turns that it took. Thank you and keep up the good work.

yeah...the last two were kinda bad...but on an overall, general look, that was excellent. well written, well done. i like, i like indeed. well anyways, that's all from me

Cheers Ja ne

Some of the pairings are a bit unbeliveable, but all in all it works. It wouldnt surprise me if Tabris was there from about 10 seconds on though.

Wow man... I don't have more time to finish reading (I'll finish later), but I read to chapter 6. The story is really good, but... That's one hell of a party huh? Kaji fucks Misato, Kensuke fucks Hikari, Shinji got Rei pregnant, so as Touji did Asuka, but one of the children was really from Shinji. Everyobody get late in this fic, nice one. I bet that Hyuga is fucking Maya, you should get someone to the poor doctor Akagi... Hahahahaha... Just kidding (well... Sort of...), really nice fic

Great story. I've really liked all the ones that you have done, that I have read so far. Keep up the good work.

This review is essentially to repay a portion of the debt I owe to Doug Dennis, who was the first established fan fiction author to support my own writing ventures. I have read and enjoyed many of his stories, though I have chosen this one as the one to post my review, this is actually more of a statement on his work as a whole, which I find to be among the most charming available to be read. No matter what criticism you may have for dennisud, you must say this: he is truly a master of both situations and interaction. Very few writers can come off as character oriented while still utilizing well developed situations, which drives Dennis's pieces. In some way, his work is light, never overwhelming, yet they also retain a great respectability by never being pretentious or embellished. The style is a humble one that opens up the reader's mind to the possibilities of these events, and he will, no doubt, find himself excepting whatever dennisud throws at them. This is not at all a bad thing, since much of his work relies on subtle changes in character. This is where his work most succeeds, but writing intensely on the characters he allows for them to change without overshadowing their original character. Rei is still Rei, regardless of a more affectionate mien; Asuka is still old bittersweet Asuka; and Shinji remains the everyman-the table rasa-the universal POV. His stories are a few rare examples of simple, understated tales that appeal in a sort of strange attraction to the reader, and this is something untangible-not often grasped by the novice writer or the ignorant fanboy. Any one of this stories is worth a read, and this is as a good a time as any!
-Exeter

Very enjoyable fic.

Ok, I have on main gripe with this fic of yours. Well... two, actually.

1 - The WAFF here gets so sickening at times, that I had to fight the urge to put a fist through my monitor. It's your prerogative to have as much WAFF material in your fic as you deem fit, granted, but Evangelion isn't generally the best breeding ground for this genre. Not the levels of WAFF reached by this fic, anyhow. At times, I thought I was reading something out of an Ah, My Goddess! or a Fushigi Yugi fic. And really hate to beat on a dead horse, but this fic also reminded me of Kimberly's "So Happy Together"... and that's not a good thing (note: I am not bashing Kim at all, so anyone bothering to bitch at me via e-mail about any perceived slams against the infamous author can fuck off). Now that being said, it leads me to my next complaint...

2 - This didn't feel like Evangelion at all.

Evangelion was about conflict; the struggles of the human animal in it's quest to better understand itself while fending off the antagonistic unknown threatening to destroy it. What was the main conflict with this fic? Keel Lorenz trying to get revenge for not having control of Third Impact bestowed upon him? Well that's all fine and dandy (and somewhat plausible, I'll admit), but the fasion in which you pulled that conflict into the reader's attention was seriously flawed. Nothing fell into place intil the very last (and very short) chapter, with all of the other chapters culminating into nothing but a 100-proof WAFF fairy tale. Having the main problem of your story rear it's ugly head so late into it and resolved in such a ramrod fashion not only left me with a feeling of disappointment, but also with a feeling of having waste my time. Despite everything I've said, I've actually enjoyed your fic. The plot, while not particularly original and somewhat shallow, was written in such a way that I just had to read through all 7 chapters; despite the rage-inducing amounts of WAFF and the shoddy ending, you kept me hooked. Quite a paradox, don't you think? And that, my friend, is why I'm so disappointed in this fic.

Moving on, your characterization, while wholly understandable given the nature of this fic, was off. Not by a lot, but enough to gain notice. Shinji being so bold and confident, for example. I can see him being more manly due to his experiences during Third Impact and all, but to this degree? Nope. You could have toned his character down a bit, like during the scenes where he had to calm himself down with a spot of sake. If he were something like that (not *exactly* like that, mind you), then I could easily say that he'd be more IC than he currently is in this fic. Asuka was an issue with me, as well. The exchanges she shared with Shinji were just too unbelievable. It was almost like you extinguished her flame, and replaced it with a sparkler. I know her character change was due to the same occurances as Shinji's, but damn... I'll skip reviewing everyone else, as I'm pretty sure you get where I'm coming from. Hmm... now that I think back, you did at least keep Gendo IC. You strayed outside the lines a little bit, but overall, his character felt... right.

As I alluded to above, the plot could use a serious overhaul. The entire thing felt like an episode of 7th Heaven, wherein most of the show is filled with nothing but disturbingly happy people talking about how absolutely happy their lives are, and how absolutely happy they are to be living their soul-numbingly happy lives, with some form of "conflict" entering late into the thing, which is solved in an absolutely perfect way. You get where I'm saying? The ending was just *way* too convenient and contrived to be believable. And Kaworu's nick-of-time entrance merely put icing on the cake. Oh, and did I mention that the use of the abandoned warehouse for the final showdown was downright cliché?

Spelling and grammar were pretty good, overall, but there were a few areas that were questionable. I'd run this thing through another spellcheck if I were you.

All in all, this fic was highly flawed and it needed some major revisioning. However, it was also entertaining, and provided a good hour's distraction. Had the story mechanics been revamped along with a few characterization issues, this would have been grade-A material. But as it stands right now, I'd probably have to give it a C. But I'm not the one to give out grades; that's a bit pretentious. So I'm just going to advise you seriously rethink the plot of this fic, retool it, then repost it.

Who knows? Maybe I won't have the urge to destroy my monitor the next time.

Good ending, though the last 2 chapters seemd identicl. Keep up the good work, Ja-ne (_)

Interesting, keep up the good work. Ja-ne (_)

I love this story so far! Im a big fan of evangelion and it looks like you put alot of thought into this please check out my story click on my pen name and look at stories authored please read and review my story its a sequal to evangelion and yes i know there is spelling errors plan to reupload the chapters again later corrected of all errors please point them out in the review thanks well see yah please read it soon

FOR THE LOVE OF GOD SOMEBODY ANSWER THAT IMPERIAL ANIME CRITIC.