beautifully done!

have i mentioned i love your chapter titles? i respect and admire your dedication to them... they are clever and wonderful (and i know they are hard work: tried it, gave up on it).

wonderful rescue scene and i love the bit with the glove...very clever and rendered so that i could see it clearly in my mind's eye.

and i love this kind of stuff:

“Batting glove,” the Doctor interrupts, “Aldebaran Ultra Cricket!” Holding up his gloved hand he continues, “the only civilization to play Cricket across realities. I picked this up at their Pan-Galactic Series against Betelgeuse Prime.”

it makes everything so much more "real" feeling when you flesh things out like that.

lovely ending. love a wistful doctor...

interesting. pretty good story. hope to read more from you as long as its doctor who with donna in it :D

good end!

this is a simply wonderful line:

With that thought, the Doctors' feet find a will of their own and sprint him back towards the Tardis. Determination burning in his eyes and talking to himself and the Tardis, the Doctor begins his usual dance around the controls.

uh-oh. i have a bad feeling about this!

“It' the lack of time,”

TOTALLY fascinating. i am endlessly enthralled with the idea of Time, and how it is a manifestation of our consciousnesses (and unfortunately i inflect such musings on my readers endlessly).

THIS fascinates me!

and another great chapter ending! bravo!

nice:

“This place is an impossibility wrapped in a paradox, hidden in a contradiction!”

and impressive:

cutting the temporal field of the Tardis at right angles with a large magnetic field backed by a massive physical inertia.

and a cliffhanger! excellent!

love the last 11 lines. this is lovely dialogue and very much THEM.

Good chapter

Help Doctor!!

It's me again!

" your time to nourish the Superior"

Troubles for Donna and the Doctor...

Again a small review to congratulate you for this chapter, very original and interesting!

good start