|Reviews for Nephrite's Story|
| Ramenluver 6/29/09 . chapter 1
"Have fun kicking around my Mary Sue."
*tansmorphs back into dragon, rips off Mary Sue's head, and starts kicking it around* Yes, great fun. :D Oh, crap...her head got stuck one of my hind claws. XD
Wow...I've never seen Cats, so I'm totally lost. It made me think of an episode of Jerry Springer, though. 'She cheated on me, so I killed her lover, raped her, was disowned by my father, and abandoned my child, all in one night.'
*cue boos from the audience*
Your writing wasn't that bad, but there were a few typos.
I'm sorry if I don't read on...it's just that I'm completely lost. *scratches head*
| SummerRose12 6/29/09 . chapter 6
I thought it was a good story. It was a bit of a lackluster wrap-up, but don't let that put you down, it was a well crafted tale over all!
I thought all of the drama and suspense made it all worth reading. And of course, being the sappy romantic that I am, I couldn't get over the KettxNephi pairing! Very well done!
The kitten that Regilo had to beat up, but saved was a little random, but it all kind of tied together at the end!
This story was very well done as far as descriptions, dialogue, and characterizations go, but of course I caught a few spelling/grammar errors in the beginning.
(Yes, I can be a bit of a grammar Nazi *sigh*) Aside from that, you did a brilliant job, and I think it was a fantastic, well made fic!
| SummerRose12 6/29/09 . chapter 5
Ouch. That must've hurt Julius. Can't say he doesn't deserve it, and Nephi pointed out 6 reasons why. Lovely SUSPENSEFUL chapter, I must say. All of the description and dialogue, it just got me excited! Characterization was good. Very glad, and the whole thing was ragingly climactic! Now what will happen? I will have to click to find out, *click-click*
| SummerRose12 6/29/09 . chapter 4
Nice! Another twist in the plot! This story is getting good! A betrayal, leads to another betrayal! Brilliant! I thought your dialogue was very strong on this chapter! Great work, as usual.
| SummerRose12 6/29/09 . chapter 3
Hehe. This was sweet, and funny. First off, when Kett followed her, I thought that was kind of romantic! (I'm a sucker for a sappy love story, go figure.) And then if became funny when Nephi met Miya. Now you livened the story even more by thickening the plot! *drowns in thick plot...* Great job!
| SummerRose12 6/29/09 . chapter 2
I really didn't see that coming. For some reason, someone had to return to Nephi's past, I wasn't expecting Lionheart. And Julius killed her mom? That was sad, but it shows what cruelty that cat does. Wow, in just two chapters, you have already caught my interest with such intense emotion and suspense. ABSOLUTELY LOVE IT!
| SummerRose12 6/29/09 . chapter 1
For one thing, I thought this was a very suspenseful beginning. At first, I thought it was confusing, I mean, Macavity being killed off? Almost seems impossible, but the more I read of the prologue, the more it made sense.
It's a good start, I must admit. I'll have to read on. Great job.