That was really sad :(. Really it was...you're annoyingly good at writing.

Lol..typo of my own: Keep up *THE good work :)

Interesting start...I'll be on the lookout for updates.

Only one teensy little thing...towards the end you have Susan returning home and you refer to her family's "diseased" (sick) home...I think you mean "deceased" (dead). That's all!

Keep up he good work!