Nice little short story! Always love me some B E!

I loved it! And it's a promising beginning of a story... What happened with Jake? What did he think? Would he try to get Bella back? Maybe try to not let her leave with Edward so Edward and Emmett have to intervene? Jijiji...

YAY! cheeseyness galore!

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i liked it. it was good! and the cheesiest was sweet! almost strawberry kisses sweet!

lol, lame.

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great entry! love it!

-jen

I liked that! Very well written!

That was cute. I think I like bartender Edward. And I like how you incorporated all of the tastes from the very beginning.

awesome job. i liked Edward's nickname: cinnamon. i think i've heard it before but for a *cough* rat *cough* so yeah. it sounds better for Edward.

Aw, I like how you tempered sweet with sexy. Like you made Bella's desire for Edward obvious but then there was this innate Bella-ness t it which reflected her innocence and sensitiveness. And I actually really adored the cheesy pick up lines, I think it made them more natural.

Really good, congratulations on being the first entry and good luck!

Helena