love the plot line so far! your characters are well developed, and the story flows well. a few things though...would you mind not underlining the whole chapter? it makes it rather difficult to read. and also, technically Gabriel isn't Melindas brother after all. though if this was set in season 3, we wouldn't know that, so i guess it just depends on what season this was supposed to take place.

keep writing! i would love to read more, and find out what Gabriel wants, and if we can really trust Kara and cloud!

OMG this is so freaking good!! I cant wait to see what happens next!! i hope you update soon!! Please!!