Onee-chan! *hugs* i miss you! *glomps*

Hehe. I want to er.. Point out some grammatical errors that i found.

-First-
>"Even it reeked and unkempt..."

I think you should put the word 'was' before 'reeked'. In this sentence, I consider the word reeked as an adjective, it refers to the state of the hair.

-Second-
>"Smee was thinking, but that was a skill that he couldn't master."

I'm just feeling a bit awkward at this. So I prefer it to become: "Smee was thinking, but it wasn't the skill he was capable of." Or add an 'of' after the word 'master'.

-Third-
>"Are you meant Mr. Pan?"

This is wrong. It should be, "Do you mean Mr. Pan?" the tenses, ok. ^^

-Fourth-
>"What creature which very fond of banana?"

Mm, you should put the word 'is' after 'which'. Don't forget the to be.

-Fifth-
>"...just like mother's lullaby."

Put an 'a' before 'mother'.
Actually there are more, but it's getting late here and i don't want them to take away my laptop *scowls*

Sorry if i'm wrong in pointing the errors, Onee-chan! But those what i could think of. Regardless, it's a great story! I love this.

~zephirus

I love the "Kids". Hahaha. Smee is just so very "babu~" (Can't find the hilarious equivalent of that word in English atm)...

Some grammatical errors at Banana theme, but everything else is fine. Nothing too hard to fix. Ehehe.

More Smee abuse please <3

ahem... Peter x Tinkerbell. this one is not one-sided love story, aye?

Hair
Even it reeked and unkempt, but it was Tink’s home. Peter’s hair.
- more like a nest, maybe? haha.

can't say more this time. i'm just waiting patiently for the next 5 themes, and the next, and the next...
more fluff, maybe? ^^

-konohafled-