i thought you might have abandoned the story, but im glad you didn't. This chapter was Ok, update as soon as you possibly can

I like how this chapter turned out. It's not your best, as you mention, being a filler chapter and all, but still good. I look forward to the next chapter, and possibly learning more about Arthur's thoughts about Passelande's filly.

smithsoniangirl - dont listen to some people here. your writing is fine! and for those who dont see that: go into a bookstore and buy a novel from a "professional" if youre so keen on reading stuff thats "perfect". for what its worth, maybe youll find what you want in a story there. this is an online community dedicated to people who fell in love with a story and want to explore its dimension further. they dont get money for it, they dont get publicity for it, they do it because they love what theyre doing, writing, imagining. many people here write because they like it and want to share, some have a beta for extra care, some dont because they dont think they need that or they just havent got one, period. critics are good and welcome, i imagine, but theres a difference between constructive and deconstructive critics. taking someone down because you dont like their writing style or whatever is not cool, man. and smithsoniangirl - your writing can compete with the professional authors out there. believe me, there are some really horrible authors out there, i have no idea how they even got to publish a book, theyre just that horrible. and they have all the betas and editors in the world...

anyway, good luck with everything, i hope you wont forget about this wonderful story here! ;)

To be honest, I'm glad you're opting for a beta. Your grammar and spelling are OK but so far the story is nothing short of dull. I think you are trying to portray a meaningful relationship between Shadowfax and your OC but it just seems that your OC is plonked into the stables without any real significance. There's too much going on to focus on so far (i've read up to chapter fourteen) ... it's a jumbled mess. It would have been better if you'd concentrated on one area that's going to create tension, i.e the centaurs, but when they took hold of Camelot with their drinking "spell" ... it was quite lauaghable. I'm not sure whether you were trying to be ironic or not but I couldn't take them seriously. To be honest, I don't think Arthur would have allowed these silly plot devices (the centaurs) to be running amok in the kingdom and sending horses running through the castle is completely idiotic ... and slightly cruel.
Last of all your writing. It's dull. Really dull. Hell, i'm not perfect but the chapter's i've read felt like reading stage directions in a play i.e. ( her smile missing and her face portraying her seriousness. You just decribe what's going on. Simple actions like shaking hands/smiling/whatever don't have to be long sentences such as: "Penelope smiled and reached out with her hand, taking Arthur’s and shaking it," could be rephrased as: "Penelope smiled. She reached out and shook Arthur's hand." In essence, there isn't enough motivation or spark to the writing.
Anyway that's it. Hope this CC has helped you.

Oh!! I can't wait for the next chapter this is getting so good. I wonder what the next plot arch is going to be... ^.^

Well, You know me pretty well, and how well I critique your stuff. I catch spelling mistakes really well, not so much on the grammar.
I also think you've seen my profile before too, and you've read Stuck on the Slow Path. Illusory Love is not my best work, so please don't take that into account when considering my abilities.
Others are mostly one-shots.
Hope you gain some time in your life and really consider me being your beta.
Isis

Hi, can I ask why you've named a horse from Lord of the Rings? Shadowfax is Gandalf's horse.

another great chapter!

Erm, ah, eh?
Uther let them have their way too easily, I think. He's stubborn, extrememly stubborn. I cite episode 4, Poisoned Chalice. He wouldn't even let his son save a servant after he had gone through all the work to save a servant and the servant had saved him!
See, Uther is a stubborn **.
Looking forward to more. Keep writing!

Awesome! I'm glad Uther decided they could be together! I loved his line, "And... be responsible." He sounds just like any normal father talking to his son about his new girlfriend. Loved it! Can't wait for the next chapter!

Great job on these last few chapters! You did a good job with the progression from the love letters to Shadowfax's training and now to Uther's decision. I can't wait to see whether Passelande has a foal or not. Keep up the good work, and good luck with school and your other story. I'll be sure to read that one as well.

great chapter! update as soon as you can

OMIGOSH! THIS WAS LIKE ONE OF THE BEST CHAPTERS! I was super happy when Arthur got thru to Shadowfax and then when Uther wanted to see her I'm all, "NO! CRAP CRAP CRAP!" Please update really soon! Uhg, my heart is thumping like CRAZY!

To be continued... Bum Bum bum... Great chapter! Man, did Penelope get ticked! I'm glad Arthur's gonna try horse-whispering! Can't wait till the next chap!

I really liked this chapter. I liked how Penny writes her letters, not as poetic as Arthur, but she just pours her feelings onto the page. I think you should make the Gwen/Rowan thing seem to work out at first, but then it doesn't. I agree, Rowan is annoying! :D