Your characterization of Eva was spot-on. This read like a missing scene from the manga. It makes me wish for more

Excellent writing!

Oh, I love the way you write Eva.

haha! I really loved this story. Tenma and Eva's loneliness was so perfectly decribed! The end left me with a big smile over the face!

Good job! keep going on!

Wow. Just Wow.

This was a good story. You actually feel it when you read. Everything from Tenma's loneliness and uncertainty to Eva's resignation was so well done. I have never really cared much for Eva as a character, but I enjoyed the way you portrayed her here. And the line about a sagging old man e.t.c? Classic! I laughed out loud at that one.

Keep up the good work.