The writing was hard to understand at times, however the concept behind it was great. I felt as though you had a nice foundation for a long story, but then ended it to quickly.

Man you really suck at his

It was short, but awesome! :D

There wasn't really much to this story. The dialogue was rather flat. We also didn't get to know much about the loan shark. Get into his head. Give a little background. Why did he become a loan shark? Was there something else he wanted to do? Maybe there are some deadbeats he enjoys seeing hurt than others. Maybe he reads an article about the Punisher offing some drug dealers or mob guys and thinks to himself, "Thank God my operation is small. A guy like Punisher will never bother me. Thank God for that, because I want nothing to do with that psycho."

Hope that helps.

Very Punisher in style. Keep writing