Egad! Jayne is starting to sound like a sophisticate. I love it!

I dearly hope that the next entry will have Jayne hunting down the rat-gut leaving parthenogenetic bastard. I'm pretty sure the reaction of the crew members to Jayne's stalking would be hilarious. It's also sweet that Jayne was throwing knives with River in the hold. Kind of a nice big brother thing to do.

Now only if they did steralize hospitals that well.

I love that Jayne is learning new words just to upset and put the others on the defensive! And just who is the creature leaving rats around? Does it possibly start with the letter R and end with iver?

Now I'm really getting into this. Jayne explaining to himself that he can accurately use the word 'rectitude' was as funny a line I've read in everything you've written. I wish there would have been more at the end about how disappointed Jayne was, because well more Jayne is always better. But its really fun to see what goes on aboard Serenity from Jayne's point of view.

Much improved. I can tell you are really starting to get into this character. (I hope Man of Misunderstanding is still coming though). The beginning two lines really tickled my fancy and had me giggling. And the abscess/abyss joke was pure gold. And I am absolutely thrilled that there was more cussing and "ain't no way I'm havin' a piece o' that flowery **"

Wow, so I totally thought I would have ample time to review this new story. Then I go visit my mom for 4th of July and find 2 more chapters up already. So, I'm going to do this as if reviewing them one at a time.

This new story isn't bad. I still totally love Man of Misunderstanding for its literary borrowing and smart Jayne, but this new story has me interested. I can tell you are sll trying to find the characterization of Jayne for this chapter though. It like you haven't quite settled on how learned or how "Rim" you think he's going to be. For example the allusions to Atropos and Iesu seemed a little out of place with the rest of the diary dialogue. Other points in subsequent entries I would like to see are: Jayne cursing more, Jayne calling Mal and idiot more and imagining his gruesome demise, and general Jayne musings.

Also, I did dearly love Jayne talking about how Kaylee mangles the English language. That was pure iscariot love!

Liked it a lot.

As a dedicated fan of your writing, I couldn't wait to read this new product-and, so far, I haven't been disappointed. Not sure where the story's going, but it's taking an interesting twist to get there. Please continue, and thanks for giving us great fiction!

Like this idea. you could take this story anywhere. I especially like the idea of Jayne Cobb exercising a literary bent. If he can write an entertaining story, there's hope for us all!

I much prefer the second chapter to the first - this sounds a lot more like Jayne! And the description of Simon and Kaylee ... priceless!

Please continue.

I liked it. Good start. I'll be watching for more.

LOL at dung beetles sniffing at the idea of using Badger for its eggs. Love this so far.