I like this! Please continue?

Great story! I love this twist you have created. I can't imagine who Willow's daddy is! Update soon!

great update, please keep it up, am anxious to find out who took John and Marg's daughter.

I was hoping to find a new scene, and here it is!

What's to comment on? Well done, moves the story along, portrays Marguerite's anguish and anxiety, and her slowness in asking for help. Too much pride to ask sooner, no doubt.

I see that she has a knife on her belt. Makes great sense; I gave her a belt knife in my own later fics, after she found to her sorrow in one story that the switchblade pocketknife that she stole from Avery Burton in the episode, "Trophies" wasn't a good jungle survival weapon/tool. But I think she'd keep it in her boot top for emergency defense, its main role. (She did use it in one Fic to cut into jungle vines, to get water from them. But a Bowie-style knife like the men had is a better all-round item in the bush.)

What clues will be in the cabin? Will the baby be raised by wolves, like Kipling's Mowgli? Is this really, somehow, Roxton's child? I can't wait to learn more. And I hope that Marguerite learns that she and Roxton need one another. One is the yin to the other's yang.

Post more! Soon!

Gemini Explorer

Karma is gonna get Marguerite in a future life...men see her differently than women, remember.

I was glad to see her much mellowed by the third season on TV. She has very good qualities if a guy can get past the thorns.

I like that bit about Parani is the Paris of the Plateau.

Gemini Explorer

now THAT was evil! exactly what Marguerite would do.

Good start! However, a T-rex would be more like 50 feet long, not 20. They were gigantic creatures! TV seldom has them in proportion to reality.

And Veronica was only half-American. Her mother was born on the Plateau, although of Anglo ancestry. How she came to be The Protector, or what that meant was never fully explained.
Finn was also not American. Like Vee, she was born on the Plateau, so was Brazilian, although not a Latina. (Finn was the eventual descendant of Ned Malone and the Amazon girl, Phoebe.) Many Brazilians are of non-Latina ancestry. If she eventually left the Plateau, I think she'd have gone with Challenger, and adopted British citizenship. Probably neither Finn or Veronica had birth certificates, so that could be an interesting story in itself...

Your dialogue is pretty good. I find Marguerite an easy character to write. I have much the same droll sense of humor, and often found her quite funny, if rather dry. (The advantage of that is that you can rub two dry jokes together, and get a fire, so I call it "survival humor".)

Although I personally don't like the concept that the characters don't know one another, you are handling it well. I always favored the jungle adventure and realistic aspects of the show over the far-out fantasy content. But I think most viewers liked the fantasy more. So, your premise should appeal to many readers.

I hope that you'll include Finn and Challenger as well as Malone, Vee, and the Roxtons. (Hey: we all know that those two were going to become a couple...Insert a winking Smilie here.) Maybe George and Finnykins can rescue the others from their alternate reality/delusion?

The idea that they've been months at this place galls me. They were presumably on the Plateau for only a few years, and for one adventure to take months seems unlikely. But that's a personal reaction. (Maybe some strange element of the Plateau suspended normal time?)

Overall, a nice effort. I want to see how this turns out. Please keep posting!

Gemini Explorer

good start