Thank you for writing this story. I really enjoyed it and hope you'll write another one soon.

I suppose you added the "pet peeves" note after me!haha.. but seriously,I absolutely LOVE all of your stories(i only read HOC,HOC 2,the prize,tokens and slave)you have really amazing storytelling talent.Hope you continue enthralling us with your stories,AYVID.(P.S:- This is the first review I'm giving to a story even though I've been on this site since about 2 years so consider yourself honoured! :D)

Oh, I liked this. You've got wonderful suspense in certain places, and I like how you made Akane a little cheeky with her humour in getting Ranma back for lying to her about his curse. great ending as well, though I would have liked something about delegated from Sumo promising retribution for the death of their Prince...

I wonder What Akane is hiding...?
and the fact if they will truly love each other and not out of lust.

whoa...that was something...*speechless*

AHH!
I can't wait til the next chapter!

Lol the following night.
XD Ranma sure is in control,eh?

Oh wow that sounds so cool,I hope Akane's family will be saved,and she will not hate Ranma,but fall for him!

god i'm sorry i haven't read the end of the story sooner, but i did know.
i loved our story, really.
it was wonderfull from the begining to the end.

i like that neither ranma or Akane have o die, =)
and i like they made love in diferent places xD i would like to do so sometime xD but shss xD

thx for writing this awesome story!!

i hope you write another sometime!

Well, I said that I would leave a review, so here goes.

This story had one of the best openings that I have ever read in a fanfiction. It was gripping and just begged the reader to continue reading to find out what was going on. Exceptional job on that.

Overall I liked the story.

However (isn't there always a however), this is a fusion, and as such it is extremely hard to handle the characters well. The characters and their relationships need to be kept as close to that of the canons as possible. You did a good job of it, but I think that you could have done better in some instances.

For instance, I think that switching Ryoga and Kuno might have worked better in this story. Why? Well, both Ryoga and Kuno are in competition for Akane in the manga and in your story, so there is no real advantage there. However, Ryoga is a friend of sorts with Ranma, while Kuno is not. Thus, placing Ryoga as Ranma's captain of the guard would have placed Ryoga in a better position to take advantage of that. There could have been a better dynamic between Ranma and his Captain of the Guard if the Captain had been Ryoga than was possible with Kuno. Admittedly, the motivation for Kuno to attack Hidden Lake would have to be modified, but not a lot would have been lost in that modification. Although, having the Warduke be Kuno would have made the attempted seduction scene much better.

The addition of the O.C. princess at the party who used to be engaged to Ranma was unnecessary. This role would have been better filled by Ukyo. This would have added another set of elements to the story. It would have set up an under current of tension between Akane and Ukyo that Ukyo used to be engaged to Ranma, also it might have made it more believable that Ukyo betrayed them if she was engaged to Ranma and betrayed him because of the breaking of the engagement, which should not have been her choice.

Kodachi was just plain out of place. Family in the canon should always remain family in a fusion. So, placing Kodachi in but not making her Kuno's sister was just jarring. Since there really wasn't anything really tying Kodachi to that role I think that picking another character would have been better. Perhaps, to balance out Hiroshi and Daisuke, Kodachi should have been filled with a combination of Yuka and Sayuri. This would have been a much better match as someone that Akane was friends with and would have completely avoided the broken familial ties without taking away from the role that Kodachi served.

I liked what you did with Mousse and Shampoo. Making them of similar tribes and shapechangers was an excellent twist. These were after Ranma and Akane perhaps the best handled characters in the whole story.

Cologne however, falls into the same category as Kodachi. Given her family ties to Shampoo in the canon I didn't feel she was right for the witch character, although she does look like an old crone. A better character, especially given the visual of drawing the power off of Akane would have been Hinako as the witch. This also would have allowed you to further the whole "Soun hid from her when she came" since this would have allowed you to carryover the canon attraction of Hinako for Soun. Also, given that Hinako is already an energy vampire of sorts she also easily fits into a witch/evil character slot.

Like I said, I liked this story, and fusions are notoriously difficult to do, but I just wanted to point out some areas where I think it might have been handled differently for a slightly better effect.

And... it's over. I can't believe it was only four months (to the day!) since you started posting this. Thanks for keeping up the pace.

I really like the way you finished this up, and dealt with the "oh no, Akane's gonna die!" issue. Having the goddess take half the life force she needed from each of them seems simple, even obvious now, but I found it elegant and fitting. And of course it would take them getting to the brink of death (or over it, since that's what they thought) to admit their feelings to one another.

Having the conflict between Islay and Hidden Lake be the original source of the goddess' weakening, and the problem that allowed Ryoga's forces to invade so easily, was a great touch. I really liked the way that it helped tie together the theme of unification at the end of the story. Speaking of which, I really liked Ranma's little speech. Akane's was good, but I liked the "I wanted to conquer Hidden Lake, but Hidden Lake has conquered me instead" line a lot. A nice turn of phrase, that.

And of course we had to have one more love scene. Well executed as always.

I do wonder what ever happened to Cologne. Is she still out there plotting to get her hands on Akane's power?

"Soun and Genma met at official meetings at first, each wary of the other, before they discovered a mutual interest for board games. Then, they were inseparable."
I lol'd.

Ah... the end of another good one. Now to settle in to wait for the next chapter of House of Cards. Looking forward to it!

Yay I love a happy sexy ending. Maybe woulda liked a little more mention of the bite markings but I guess they didn't mean as much as I thought they did. Tee hee the goddess can be male, I'd love to see Kodachi's reaction. I'm all energized after reading this last chapter, thank you so much!

Ah no but now she knoows she loves him and and no. just a great chapter.

great work to bad it might be the last akanes a princess fic.

waiting for HOC.

Thank you for updating so soon! I couldn't wait to read the end of your beautiful fanfic...

I really liked the beginning of this chapter, it reminds me of the last episode of the manga, with Ranma holding in his arms Akane. And it's so truly Akane to get angry at Ranma because she thinks he's dead!

I hope you will start something new soon, I'll be looking forward to it, you are a very gifted writer!