Ahahaha. Wow.

Okay, so. I couldn't wait til I finished watching this series to dive into the Pit searching for fics. I've read quite a few of them, by now, and yet this one amused me to no end.

Poignant little piece this is... and while a couple spots seemed a little rough, I liked how philosophical this is.

Oh, and the "have them all in one big, committed relationship by lunch"? SO TRUE. <3

Thanks much.

Bittersweet end and powerful. Great fic =3

"have them all in one big, committed relationship" oh, that would be a sight for sore eyes! Too bad Mugi-chan is such a coward in this story!
Love does have its painful moments... but it also has its wonderful ones.

Most excellent.

I'm very fond of the introspective feel. The tense, repetition, and parallelism is well-executed. You add a believable depth to Ritsu's character--the pensiveness does not detract or seem out of character.

"Ritsu understands that if Yui is her first crush, then Mio must be her first true love. That she met them and realized this out of order is both fitting and not at all troubling."

And I am something seriously enamored with these two lines.

~Southpaw

"Wrote this over a couple of hours, late at night, hopefully it doesn't show."

It doesn't show at all. This was simply wonderful and for such a short one-shot, it was thoughtful and surprisingly deep.

Your work in this universe is refreshing. Thank you and please write more.

Whoa, nice. Really, really nice. I'm still in awe and just can't find any more words to add without sounding like an incoherent idiot, so I'll end it there. Fav-ed. Definitely.

Beautiful, simply beautiful. One of these short stories that are so ... how to say... impressive because they say all that's necessary and nothing else. Glad to be able to read it.
See you later with another fic.

While I don't really approve of multiple pairings, I think your fanfiction is pretty insightful. Each girl really does hold a special place in everyone's heart.

One thing that confuses me is the POV. It's not really Ritsu's - rather, it's more like an all-knowing narrator who just happens to hang around Ritsu.

There are slight grammatical mistakes (Your second line, the Yui line, is phrased awkwardly, and you tend to write long-winded sentences. While I understand the need to relay information to the readers (I would know - I'm fairly long-winded as well), short and clear sentences are the best way to go. Not only does it make your story easier to read, but it also lessens the chance of accidentally writing a run-on sentence. Believe me, it happens.

"Wrote this over a couple of hours, late at night, hopefully it doesn't show." Ha, I write my stories in the same fasion. It doesn't show too much, other than the aforementioned grammar errors.

Keep writing!

Wow :O!

this stuff is really deep.
truly amazing :D! I like your writing style :)

they're all in a big mess huh? wouldn't surprise me.

It'd be awesome if you wrote like a sequel were Mugi-chan plays matchmaker xD

but then again this is a really good story just the way it is :D

wait! you left azusa out xD!