I haven't seen this yet, but it's really sad, and wonderful.

I'm glad you think that she knew he came after her, it kills me that she might not have.
This is beautiful (that word again), and I feel so sorry for Michelle that she doesn't know what happened to Tony.

I like the last line. David Palmer is so amazing (family joke: he does no wrong, he is god (Aaron Pierce is his head angel - Gabriel, is it? I wouldn't know)). I think he does miss Sherry (odd relationship) and I think this is perfect.

I think this is accurate. Dina's a very complex character, and you write her well (obviously).

OK, question answered.
I like how in his last moments he doubts his faith. I think that's realistic. Beautiful, though I say that too much.

What does she deserve?
This is amazing. I love how when she sees them the first thing she says is 'I don't know how to explain myself'.

Don't go to the light! Sorry, couldn't resist, I'm weak willed.
I like how they all go through different ways of finally 'dying'.
Wonderful, of course, as always.

This is beautiful, and if I were Teri's father, I'd be a little mad too. Question: are these people all figments of their imagination?

I always feel so sorry for Jamey, and, of course, you write her well. That was great.

I've not heard of that, and I can't wait to read this. Your prologue is fantastic.

This is such a cool idea! I love the way you wrote everyone and their beliefs as they died.

This is a really great concept! The first chapter was good, not one of the most loved characters in 24 but still you wrote her well! Look forward to reading more!

Excellent concept! I really look forward to what you have in mind for each character. :)