I loved the field where they fought Kimimaru, you described it beautifully. It was cool how you contrasted it to the noisy helicopter. I also like how you captured Tsunade really well, though she barely said anything.

The ending was funny and well written too.

xD Oh dear. Good luck, Jiraiya! You'll need it.
I like how he's thinking like some decrepit old man.

Yay for more fanfiction! : D I missed you, I really did. I hope I see some more from you soon!

Obviously, it was hastily done, but you still manage to paint a few great pictures in my head. Jiraiya's thought about 'Anyone with a lazer beam thinks they're hot stuff nowadays' is hilarious, and his reaction right afterwards is pretty funny as well.