I appreciate the writing and all, but seriously? Star wars taking on the mighty Imperium? In a space battle they would last seconds at most, If you don't believe me, look at a picture compering the sizes of a "capital"? probably mean Emperor class battleship to the biggest star wars has to offer

this really really sucks a LOT

I hope Ravenor goes and ******$! #$%&**((&&&&$&&*****

Nice Chapter. Well done. This story is quite well written. Waiting for more. I hope that Revan will meet up with her own people.

That was awful! Disgusting! I agree with everything Ravenor said. Characters a complete Mary Sue.

"We will break there minds with our faith in Him, for the enemies of Him are burned by faith in Him!"

That sentence is in terrible need of editting. My suggestion is to scrap this idea and write a more original, intereseting and less one-sided than this current piece.

Okay? so Revan is an Eldar, a Mandalorian, AND Mandalore?

Yay, I can kind see why Ravenor bashing on you...

IT SUCKS!

Well this is what i got out of it: Theres some chick who comes outa no where then is way to advanced 4 te imperials. *Imperials look at curves; jaws drop* Chick (Revan) turns into lara croft. Enemys appear rape the good guys, good guys dont care. But Lara (Revan) tells them 2 return 4 so they do.

Well thats it in a nutshell, hope you agree!

Hopefully the fleet that just came in is the Imperium. I would like to see the Imperium get some revenge for what just happend.