OMG that was so bad it really hurt to read,the language use was so simple i don't even know what to say it was so bad. it just ruined roswell for...
ok heres some tips: check your grammar,use capital letters at the beginning of sentences and plese no more "ill" make it "i'll". Make it more interestin by being more descriptive and let us kno what the characters are thinking but not just through dialogue but rather through what ther're not saying too and expressions.

It's alright. was hard to read bunched up like that though. And i'm guessing you didn't spell or grammer check it. lol, not that i do either.

Stop. Just stop.

This is terrible.

Haven't you ever heard of capital letters? Paragraphs? Grammar? Seriously, use your spell check. Go back to school. Learn how to write. And the story is bad too.

I CAN'T WAIT TOO SEE WHAT HAPPENS TO THEM!;)

THIS A REALLY GOOD START!

POST MORE SOON!:)