£brutally pecked"
"rhymes-with-shove"
Oh Kanda. Why is everything always so violent with you?

This is seriously very sweet. Kanda is written perfectly, the way he's hiding concern with irritation, yup, Kanda would do that. Lavi is playful and fun (I love the way you have him speaking, seems like it would be really singsongy and teasing) and judging by the way he's speaking to Kanda, not afraid to die. :P
I could actually see them having this exact conversation and acting this way. You're always so good at having characters stay in character.
So, yeah. You're awesome. :]

I love your rhymes ;) You totally deserve like a whole pack of gold stars. I think the idea of the eye surgery is quite easy to comprehend, I think it was the first few lines that left me a bit dazed XD But otherwise, it was perfect~ v And even though you make Kanda say I love you (quite indirectly mind you), it is still very in character. The slight violence along with all the slightly dirty yet totally sweet jokes were definitely a plus :DD

"...Plus since my flaming gay boyfriend likes to get in touch with his inner whale and swim in the ocean insanely often, I wanna make sure I can see you. In case y'drown or somethin', honey cakes." How can I not laugh? Kanda and his inner whale?? This combination is too original~ XD

Thanks for sharing this, I loved it too much~~

Kuro

This is awesome!!1 I haven't read anything good since...forever (I seriously need to fix my critical eyes..), so this is a breath of fresh air...

Hahaha this fic's really funny! XD
I like the convos between them! It's so sweet~ And the way they say stuff is very nicely done too! ^^