aw, I love this story, when are u gonna continue this? I hope you'll add up the next chapter as fast as u can :)

Yeah! Now, Wan Muhammad and Yeo Hui Qing will be next in the upcoming story!

wicked story yea! but still i don't understand how come Zob and Greta would allow those two 2 kiss? eew! anyway, ur a born-author! write some more this kind(but nothing gross, kiss might still b ok) of story! Can't wait if this has another chapter.

Cute! Absolutely loved it! But you weren't very clear on the transition in this chapter from school to Zick's room so you might wanna watch out for that. Also, try to describe your character's feelings a little more.

Other than that, everything's fine. Can't wait for more fics from you!
- Stef

Hey, thanks for the second chapter. Your writing has really improved a lot! However, you improve further by being more detailed. Don't be afraid to describe the characters feelings more.

Like in your first chapter you ended with Elena staying over night and sleeping in Zick's room. Instead of just jumping straight to the next morning, you can explore the characters and their relationship further by describing how they would feel about sleeping in the same room or even the same bed.

In your second chapter, Zick said that he looks to Elena like an important member of his family. You could try writing about how Elena feels when she hears being treated as a sister especially if she wants to be treated more than a friend.

That's about it, thanks again for the wonderful fics that you've been adding to the MA community! Cheers!
- Stef

NO~! How could you end it like that! The ending was a cliff-hanger (of sorts) don't end it like that please! I think this fic has potential, please continue!

I like it! I just can't get the plot though. But anyway, nice story