Great work! Keep it up!

Hm...interesting. I'm anxious to see more!

I see what you mean. Definite improvement over the original. Even though I have an idea on how the story will go (considering it's a rewrite), I find myself needing to know more. So yeah. Go write or something. P

I like how this is starting out. It's very well written, in my opinion. Sorry if this review isn't much encouragement, though...