Awesome story, sad to

well done :D

Thankyou very much, id like to write a sequal if this gotmore reviews.

That was amazing, sad, scary, lovely. EVERYTHING.

wow, just wow

your story is going really well, i really look forward to hearing the rest.

Thankyou for reviewing. I must improve on my dramatic writing, and punctuation is one i will improve. again thankyou for reviwing, next chapter is most certainly on its way (its yours im lookin forward to though haha"

I am not gonna lie, but after you reviewed my story, 28 Hours Later, I creeped your profile and stories :P I must say, I am really enjoying this!

Here are some quick tips which my beta had passed down onto me along with some other normal, small corrections... watch out for capitals because you tend to miss some. To escalate the excitement and suspense, make the sentences shorter and choppier. Use more exclamation points and dashes to liven the text-ie: near the end of the first chapter when the father and son fight over the mother's death. Also, break down your paragraphs into smaller sections to empathize the mood and to add more dramatic effects :D

Good job! This should grow to be an interesting story! _