great fic!
they were both so in character,
and i loved the little jibes at each other.
"i've very important and better things to do."
ooh, starscream's playing a dangerous game :P

VERY nice. I liked the subtlety you kept through the story even though actions were talking so much by themselves. You also did a great job keeping Megatron and Starscream in character.

That was...hot. Felt that Decepticon heat. You did well caturing the dynamics between these two characters, even taking it to the next level - Starscream attempting to seduce Megatron, the tensions playing off each other. I also enjoyed the verbal and physical 'digs' each character got in.
I'm not sure why you are not happy w/ this fic but I thought the flow was excellent and the story was well written.

A nasty but sexy moment between these two, as they always are... Love for them works in an amusing different way than for others, doesn't it? And you did a very good job in showing it here. Great work!