This was excellent. You have Kate's voice down perfectly. I love the way you summed up Ari and Kate's relationship up in this. You write much better than a lot of native English speakers I've read, btw. I'm glad you translated it, it was a treat to read.

this is great!

Obviously your english is better than mine, because i never would have guessed that it's not your first language. :)

I liked that. And I hope you'll continue writing the pairing ^^ Maybe something longer next time? Forgive me, I just don't think there are enough good authors out there writing Kari, so I'm always trying to encourage people. ^^

Gr8

Wow!! Great work on your first NCIS fic!! Kate/Ari is a favorite pairing of mine, not least because it's difficult to imagine and even more difficult to write. You've overcome both those barriers to produce a short, powerful fic that really captures the tensions of this relationship.

By the way, English may not be your first language, but I wouldn't have known if you hadn't said something at the end of the fic. I'm impressed--I know I could never write something this good in Spanish. Congrats on being so good at writing in other languages!!

I'm so glad you translated this story. Actually the first time I watched that episode that was the first thing I thought.
Oh, one little thing you spelt 'emotional' wrong but apart from that the spelling was better then most first language-speaking people write.

That was your first NCIS fic? It was wonderful and mostly correct, other than your mispelling of "emotional" but still. Can't wait to hear more from you!

WOW!
This is awesome :D Exactly how I would Imagine Kate's feelings/thoughts to be like :D

Continue?? :D

Fic in english, review in english.

OMG SIS I LOVE YOU SO MUCH! This was the most perfect Kari I have read in my life! Kate seems so real in your words, and all her thinking about Ari is so much as I imagine it...

And the last words just KILL ME!!

(When you publish in spanish, I'll made a longest review with more words, my english is not to brilliant. Yours by the way, it's perfect! -at leaste for me-)