| Reviews for Love and Other Labels |
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Guest 5/22/13 . chapter 36 Absolutely amazing story! I loved every single word...you are brilliant! Random side note, I totally knew you were reading Wuthering Heights before I read that last author's note, from the "not God or Satan could separate us" thing, last chapter. I appreciate those little references though...it shows what I've always known to be true, that good writing will only ever be inspired by good reading. |
ladyphlogiston 5/10/13 . chapter 2Really enjoying this! It's very fun. Question: do Australians tend to favor really light eyes? Because if this was an American movie, Emilia and Darcy would both be villains. Not trying to be critical; I just love finding ways that cultural perceptions of beauty vary. |
LadyD 4/11/13 . chapter 9 Loved this chapter (9)! |
A-Nony-Mouse 1/4/13 . chapter 36 Meeeeep. That was absolutely amazing. It was a well thought out and planned rewrite and I sort of liked they way that all the characters had different personalities and layers. I started this story expecting an average P&P in modern day fic but this had so many twists and extra characters that towards the end I wasn't ruling out the possibility that Darcy, Francie and Char weren't going to be transported to an alternate universe and be joined in holy matrimony. I found your use of Australian slang natural and I've really enjoyed this story. |
justlovely307 12/21/12 . chapter 23Ok, so Howl has either depression or bipolar disorder, I'm pretty sure |
justlovely307 12/20/12 . chapter 15Elizabeth, one does not simply give away their Paramore T-Shirt, even if tgey have two others. In all seriousness though, Paramore is the greatest band to have ever roamed the Earth. |
justlovely307 12/17/12 . chapter 7First it was last chapter's song and now this chapter's? I like you and your music choices. I seriously LOVE Secret. Many people don't know it, but they know Maroon 5 and their popular songs, but this song is one of my personal favorites by them! I LOVE this story and you're an AMAZING writer! Keep up the good work! |
Marie 11/5/12 . chapter 36 Right, so I really don't want to be a hater and I just want to give an honest opinion. I'll admit that the story kept me interested, since you write in a way that's engaging for the most part. But there was no payoff after i forced myself to ignorethe silly and just keep reading. I'm not sure what bothered me more: How ridiculous the whole thing as a piece of fiction, or how it completely messed with what has got to he the best possible source material. Yes this is fiction, and fiction sometimes lends itself to the dramatic/the absurd for effect. But still, there has to be a semblance of reality to help us identify. Especially if it's a story writen about the world we live in. We might read about lives different from ours but it still has to be (or at least seem) like a believable narrative. This however was quite outlandish. The whole portrayal of England and the society, the whole 'marrige' storyline, all of that just doesn't align with real life in anyway. I've lived in England. Now, I haven't spent time around the creme de la creme of society, but I can still say the people here are pretty normal and the stuff you described is better fitted to the 1800s rather than modern times. And yeah, I guess that makes sense considering the book you base the story off. But if you're gonna modernise you should find a more believable way to transition it into the 21st century without it losing it's core essence. And that's another thing, I feel like it all diverged from the book's essence way too much at some point. Yes, fanfiction provides a great creative outlet to reinvent and tell known stories from a fresh perspective. But remembering that people came here to read stories based on their favourite characters and plots is also important. Don't get me wrong, some stuff was cool. Having a version of emma incorporated was actually pretty interesting. But some characters deviated so much from the original it was annoying. Jane for example. Yes in the book her niceness is so overstated you wonder if it can be true and if it would last. But that's what's great about it. She's the one who reminds Lizzy and the readers to be more accepting. She's the one who's loveliness keeps you from despairing at how shitty everyone else is. Yes, Lizzy is ultimately the one you end up identifying with, but Jane is the one whose sweetness gets you thinking about being a bit less mean now and again. And Mr. Bennet. Yes, he's a bit of an absentee father and has little patience for all the estrogen in his house. But he loves Lizzie so much and wants nothing but to protect her happiness. He risked the posibility of his family being ruined financially just to save her from Collins, yet your version has him 'washing his hands' of her just because he can't accept her being a musical prodigy. That's a pretty far leap, not to mention a bit extreme for any kind of parent if we're talking about realism. Also, on another note, while trying to prove that Australian stereotypes are ignorant, you've pretty much also dealt out a couple of English stereotypes. I haven't seen this rule book about what kind of tea a good English wife serves her husband anywhere on sale, but I'll make sure to keep a lookout. All in all I feel the story had so much potential but it disappointed due to the absurd narrative and the huge deviation from the original book. |
Glory Bee 8/24/12 . chapter 36I am really happy that there is a sequel to this, I have absolutely fallen in love with 3 of your pairings, Darcy/Eli, George/Emilia and Howl/Toni and very much want to see what you have written for them next. :) |
MaryJane C 7/13/12 . chapter 8As a point of curiosity: why does every character seem to wear a beanie hat? Is it an in-universe prerequisite? Also, I'd like to offer one itty-bitty piece of advice: don't overdo it with the outfit description. Mention what a character is wearing only if it's relevant for the plot. Otherwise, having to read a paragraph-long description of sartorial combinations and permutations every time someone makes an appearance can get very old very fast, especially as it resembles something called "mary sue"-ness. It shows that more importance and focus are placed on the appearance and general aesthetic of the characters than on their inner workings. The same is true of physical description. It is enough to specify only once that so and so are beautiful and attractive. An attentive reader will remember, I assure you, and visualize everyone as described. Having to constantly read about a character's impossible perfection is tiresome and irritating. Personally, it reminds of Twilight, where a paragraph could not go by without our heroine expounding on someone's (usually Edward's) god-like beauty. In these cases, less is more. It should be enough to give your reader an idea of what to imagine and how, but also to allow them to picture the flow of the story without constantly being interrupted with lengthy descriptions of clothes and accessories. As a reader, I should know that the heroine is a slender brunette with a pale complexion and lively eyes, because that is what I shall picture as I read the story. But any more descriptors and I'm impatiently glancing at my wristwatch, waiting for the mentions of golden flakes and various impossible colours in her eyes to end so that I can get to the interesting, "plotty" part of the story. I hope I have not been too harsh, but these mistakes can be very glaring especially when repeated ad nauseum. Please allow your readers the liberty of imagining their very own characters, appearance-wise. It makes for a richer, smoother, more enjoyable reading experience. |
Guest 7/9/12 . chapter 36 I'm not often fond of teenage based stories, as I find the writing and depiction of the characters highly immature. However, this story was an exception. I thoroughly enjoyed the banter and development of the characters, and felt the language used was very appropriate for the ages of the characters, whilst not being easily identified as "generational". Well done. |
atthetouchoflove 6/1/12 . chapter 28oh jesus this is so melodramatic but like fuck it all, i'm crying |
siobhan.22 3/17/12 . chapter 1Good chapter |
rigolo 2/6/12 . chapter 35 okey, so here is my advice; georgie sounds more like a 5/6 year old than 10 or 11. i have a couple of younger siblings and well none of them are as small and childish as you described georgiana nor were they when they were 10 or 11. She sounds more like one of my 5/6 year old students with small hands and wanting to be carried and all. Further i have to admit I love the story and the sequel. good luck with the rest of your writing. |
evonna 1/18/12 . chapter 28 Wow. You can safely be called the Queen of Angst, this scene was amazing. I was wondering all along whether the 'declaring of love' scene would take place with Eli's refusal in it, and you've done it just beautifully. Off to read the rest.. |