A intriguing start as we now are all wondering what Sarah's college plans are (staying closer to care for Toby from the sounds of it!) and what Jareth's plans are too. I'll be very interested to see where this goes!

You have a lovely gift with descriptive language. I really like the line about the clouds. I do have to wonder though, why in the world is Jareth hanging around in Peru?

A delightful chapter!

This has been an interesting reading. Keep smiling. :-)

Adorable. A lovely Toby-Sarah connection.

I like the jump cuts. Very cinematic.

What an interesting style. Your story reads very much like a screenplay. I must admit I have many questions. 1st. why so short love for the first chapter. Second why is Jareth in peru and watching Sarah from a movie theater, and third why is Sarah writing in cliche's, is she tired of the world and unhappy. Intersesting. Onward to the next chapter.

wow =] that was amazing, short yet very creative. I loved every bit of it.

Quite an interesting, and captivating chapter!

I like it :) Can't wait till the next chapter.

I've so enjoyed reading this. Keep smiling. :-)