i still wont the juugo and naruto ship bot for Haku you gave her a love for Puppetry you sorta mad a ship Kankurō and haku bot i cinda like it and remeber she's has a ice Kekkei Genkai and why dont you give naruto a Kekkei Genkai to hers my recombination

Explosion Release (爆遁, Bakuton) is an advanced chakra nature kekkei genkai. This chakra nature seems to give the wielder the ability to utilise explosive chakra in combat, allowing them to cause explosions in objects they come into contact with.

bot i really wont this one!
scorch Release (灼遁, Shakuton) is an advanced chakra nature kekkei genkai. This nature creates chakra that is capable of heating up an enemy to the point where all the liquid inside their body evaporates, killing the victim and leaving them a desiccated corpse.

naruto and juugo ship Haku and Kimimaro ship if not cry!

you should have naruto, haku, deidara, and sasori meet haku and sasori would get along and naruto and deidara would hit it off it would be so funny

write more please :D if u do ill get u a cookie

Are Naruto and Haku going to meet Dederia and Sasori durung one of the arguments over which type of art is better?

Better, but still a bit to dialogue heavy. I really have not gotten any picture for what their home is like. Knowing Anko it would have death traps tat would have to dismantled.

Hmm, a bit blunt with the parallels. However considering their youth I find it apropriate. Thus the raltionship is confirmed.

I like the bargaining. But for Sandaime I think you should have it in his head that he always planned to concede on the reasonable demands. Simly a matter of protocol to haggle, he is the top ninja after all.

With all of this Naru nicknaming I feel you should definitely have the Sexy Jutsu. Perhaps an invention of Haku's used on her brother by her and Anko as punishment. No progression or nudity just a good laugh for them anmd the audience.

Hmm, I am pleased it continues but not pleased in how it continues.

You have said that you skipped the becoming a family part because that is not your strength. Insufficent. Your title proclaims this the story of a clan's birth, yet you have chosen to skip the birth of the clan. Those moments whenm gapes narrow, when hope is replaced by genuine confidence; these would be the actual creation of a family. By skipping it you have essentially spurned your stated intent.

You are not good at this stuff? Then try writing it and when you hate it try again in an attempt to create something better. If that process fails then seek a beta or such for assistance. I myself can vounch for how much that second opinion enhances one's art.

Anko I coul;d see a scene where she accidentally cuts Naruto by him waking her up. Naruto having trust issues even though he wants to trust them so badly it is almost trangible pain. Haku would have thefear that her happiness would shatter again just as it had before.

The possibilities beckon and cajole, yet you have passed them by and left your story the poorer.

This chapter implies a similarity will develop along trhe lines of the artist duo. Your orgininality is appreciated.

So they view Anko as an older sister? Another issue that should be addressed.

I do not speak thus to condemn, as previously stated I think this story has great promise. However as I was taught, the greatest enemy of "better" is "good enough"

good

its like sasori and deidara!

I like the chapter.

good start should be interesting to see where you go from here.

its a good story i like it and for the pairing i would like to see Naruto and Isaribi there not to meny story with her and naruto and for Haku i say kiba. O and PLZ "no harem" PLZ

pretty good.

I can't really think of a good pairing for Tayuya because pretty much anyone left wouldn't be able to take her personality expect maybe, and i stress the word maybe, Kiba. I think a Isaribi/Choji pairing might work out pretty well though.

Neat story, you've done a great job with how the way things are going. Keep it up and I can't wait for more!