The proper Latin for what you were saying is:
Caeliorum oculorum occidator.
That literally means:
Killer of the sky eyes.

Neca here. Great job on the fic; keep it up. I have only two issues:
#1. Your Latin sucks.
#2. I still need reveiws for Phalanx.
#3. I still need reveiw of Artic Fugitives (L4D).
#4. I still need reveiws all around. Have a heart people! The next chapter won't come out until I've gotten at least three more reveiws.

LOL soz I mean excellent haha i spelt that wrong

Fire Kunai I must say you are an E-C-E-L-L-E-N-T writer I am loving your story so far. I am drawn to your story like a bug to a light it is very addictive.Mwhaha you are a rebell eh? I love how you have gone into a little more depth of Carmine, I always wondered about him. Please keep going coz this cheeky monkey is gonna keep reading until the end!! XD

Awesome! I love your take on the story line. Can't wait for the next chapter!

So very sorry that I've taken so long to review this chapter! I was about to click on the arrow for chapter 5 when I noticed that chapter didn't exist! *Sighs* I hope it's in the works now though.

Before I go on to the good stuff (of which there is a lot), one minor issue I have is that there are a few instances where words are repeated within the same paragraph. I can't remember where exactly - but I do recall the word "static" showing up twice either in the same sentence or paragraph. Again, these are minuscule errors that we ALL make, and that can be fixed very easily.

Onto the good stuff now.

The Lambent issue that you brought up was very clever. There are so many fragmented bits of info that we get from the game, and very few fillers to flesh some of them out. Of course, a video game doesn't and can't touch on everything, which is why we've got fan-fiction!

Anyways, I have to confess that the Maria-Ragnarok interactions are my favourite. And bringing in Hel was a great idea too. I can't wait to see what happens with those three, and how Hel and Ragnarok became Lambent. I wonder if the transition process is kinda similar to what happened to the Brumak at the end of the game, although the pair don't seem as grotesque or dangerous. Time will tell, I suppose!

Getting Carmine shot was a terrific and convincing, a good maneuver by which to draw out Jenn's bravery. I'm sure that I'm not the only reader who thinks that she's pretty courageous deep down, so seeing her change is going to be interesting.

Nice job on the action scenes too. I gotta confess that I'm a little envious - captivating action scenes aren't my forte. You also seemed to follow the in-game developments well, and I have to commend your good memory for that! With that, do keep writing - you're building up the storyline and tension marvelously.

Hope chapter 5 is coming soon!

You my friend have done an outstanding job in making this GoW fanfic. I love it! You've spun an incredibly satisfying fic that has me wanting for more. The character Jenny is awesome!! And I just love how this has so much charaterization. It's hard finding fics like this these you know? =O!

Anywho let me point out the parts I enjoyed about your fic.
1.) The dialogues... You my friend have a talent for creating some of the most funniest and interestingly nice dialogues between the characters. Some I laugh at while others I'm more amused at. The fact you included the dialogue from the game here also boosted this fics attraction rating by 10 folds.
2.) Your OC character Jenny. I just love her character xD and is indeed different from the other fics that involve strong and far more talented girls. So it was nice change =)
3.)B. Carmine. Yes, I'm a Carmine fan! I just love the dude xD! Wish he had lived -_-... I was ** through out the whole game that I melee'd at least the better part of the game. I just wanted to give those Locust a more sadistic painful death. Bullets peppering their body just isn't satisfying enough for me.
4.) The pace is just brilliant. I never got tired once in reading this fic. It was smooth too read and overall good ^^!
5.) The lenght is a definite plus for me. I enjoy fics that range from 8k to 13k words. The longer the read, the enjoyable it is... I think.
6.) Lastly, I have to give the plot of Maria and Ragnarok a "A+"! It adds a whole other element and plot to the story which is developing quitley lovely. I just can't wait what happens next =D!

Thats all I have to say ^^! I hope you can continue the story. I would be glad to make a comic off of this xD with this art-style I'm trying ^^! Keep up the excellent work and read you later! =3

Neca here.
Nice work. This is the best fanfic I've read ever. Thank you for listing my work in your list of good fanfics. I'm also a latin student. I'll be sure to include latin in my story as well when I finally have Iota Squad engage drones.

I absolutely love this story. You've crafted a completely original character for GoW2 and I applaud you on that accomplished task! Jennifer is completely the opposite of what one would normally imagine for a female solider running around with Delta, and I for one am eager to see how you continue her character development entirely. I'm also loving the small pieces of Maria's story that you're weaving into this as well. Always been a bit of mystery to see what had happened with Dom's wife prior to the tragic ending of her story in the game. With that being said, I am not entirely looking forward to the moment where Dom finally finds Maria... I hated that part in the game as well, made me upset before I became ** off and just ripped through the rest of the game as brutally as possible against the Locust, lol.

Anyways, before I continue to ramble on like a babbling fangirl, I seriously am enjoying this story and your style of writing is very refreshing. I've seen way to many stories lately where it's written from first-person point of view, and yours fits the general style of writing I tend to enjoy far more. Your action sequences are perfect, and I do love the fact that you're using almost all the original dialogue from the game as well. Keep up the good work, and I eagerly await an update to this story!!

Hey mate gotta say amazing storie just read the chapters its amazing i love your use of writing for it and i think it is an amazing storie and i really honestly think when your finished you should try and get it published cause i would most certainly buy it even though i would have read it on here

I've subscribed to you and story and added you to favorites i really hope you can continue the story and i am incredibly looking foward to the next chapters and the ones that follow
Keep up the good work

Signed:
Blackler

Loved it and well yea...
stuff like that... and I think it would make sense to call Marcus a demon I think I heard locust call them monsters once...
(but calling him demon reminds me of Halo... not that, that is a bad thing)

okay... I LOVED IT! your analogies and similies ans comparisons were so good i mean it's hard to find a story like that! it really is! and i swear that was a good idea about carmine geting shot (no matter how fan girl i get) it really was, i loved to see anderson be brave. and to show marcus accually conecting to carmine because in the book marcus baisicly took every single death as his foult and felt guilty so i'm guessing you did some research and aperantly you did great again awesome story blah, blah, blah.. writ eht e next chapter! please don't take a month or 2 or i'll be sad :( can't wait! 100 out of 5 stars!

i'm really liking the story so far! i can't wait to read more :)

:D I love this fic. I'm going to put it on my watch list now. You're a fabulous writer.

Cool chapter, I like that Maria is stayin alive (at least I think she is..) and I can't wait to read about Skorge's appearance.