 Tikigod784 9/28/11 . chapter 14Story alert was on the fritz, glad I checked on some old favorites! The fight scene this chapter was fun to read. Really makes me wish this were a game, just to play this boss battle. It is the main event after all. XP
I like your portrayal of Dante. If someone is overpowered physically, the best way to make them still interesting is to give them personality issues or mental weaknesses. Also, I never saw the TessxVergil thing.
Here's to Ninja Theory bombing their game and Capcom deciding to make a prequel where you play as Sparda. :D |
 Bounty Hunter Vincent Vega 9/26/11 . chapter 14Well from what I am about to tell you on the DmC reboot should convince you to not give Ninja Theory's idea a fighting chance at all and just move on to another video game series that hasn't been royally fucked up yet by greedy companies with unrealistic goals. Since you do not like Nero well guess what? Donte plays pretty much exactly like him except a whole lot worse. Hell I am willing to bet that he will be even more intolerable than Tidus and Hope of Final Fantasy X and XIII respectively combined. And as for the story,the story is going to revolve around some stupid propaganda about anti-capitalism. Since when was the Devil May Cry series ever about half assed, pretentious political commentary? It's essentially "Brave New World" and "1984" mashed up.
Now with all of that out of the way,let's get on with the review shall we?
I'm glad to see a Devil May Cry fanfiction that is NOT yaoi,about DmC,the reader (most likely female) getting with any of the sons of Sparda, or any other annoying crap this fandom is famous for.
I don't totally agree with all of the points being made by the anonymous reviewer but he/she does bring up a fine argument about the treatment you have bestowed upon Nero. Still I am willing to turn a blind's eye to this behavior as long as the fanfic is worth it,which it is much to my joy. I'm okay with people not liking him while I do on the other hand.
You see the main issue I have with the inclusion with OCs be it male or female is the author for the most part does not take the time to fully flesh out their history,motivation,character, and reason for being a part of the series. They slack off in this aspect and expect us to put the pieces together or imagine it is us as the character.
Most of the fanfics with OCs I see on here are nothing more than masturbatory filth ala Twilight. Yours however is different and in a very pleasant way.
Tess and your other original creations actually deserve and belong to the Devil May Cry series without causing any problems.
You have a way with writing that is extremely rare to see here. I can tell that you have studied literature very well and either must have a degree in it or are in college studying hard. I like that.
At least you are part of the few authors among here I respect that is willing to give the series depth that it has never been exposed to without being too melodramatic or boring.
I thought I give you some well deserved praise as to not make you think you don't have much readers who care about a quality story.
Man I do need to read the fanfic of yours that came before this.
Keep up the fine work and don't let anyone especially the pro DmC crowd get to you. |
 I 9/24/11 . chapter 13 I'm a huge dmc fan...and I liked your first fanfic of Dante and Tess, Frail Equilibrium. I really did.
But I have to disagree in many things with you in this fic.
1st, Nero's not a kid who can't hold up against Vergil. Sanctus said he had inheritad the power of Sparda, and his devil arm is too strong for Vergil. He impaled Dante, killed Sanctus and finished Savior, cut him some slack!
2nd, I think you gave Roy's power too much credit. Let's face it, Roy's no match for Mundus, or demons his size(he's at least 20/30 meters!). He couldn't even finish Chax, who was just a demon-lord!
3rd, I think you're underestimating Dante. Yes, he was a bit cocky at dmc3, but none of his cockiness could be seen in dmc4, or dmc2. In dmc4, he was wise, you can say. He knows how to proceed in any kind of mission, and doesn't need anyone else to guide him, his mind works fast. He's not talkative, too, but teases his enemies whenever gets a chance to. And it's not in his nature to curse, you'll never hear him say even bitch, let alone fuck. He knows when to keeep his mouth shut, and never shows his emotions, not even anger. And about breaking hell gates or that type of things, he maybe can't break it with Rebelllion, but it's quite easy for him with Gilgamesh, and he can hold Savior's entire weight, which must be at least 200 tons! And he's never at a loss for what to do. These wiccans or djinns are no match for him, not even Vergil can come close to defeat him, he's too fast and strong after dmc1.
But in case you didn't notice, Dante gets weak from much blood loss, and suffers from impaling wounds. Though he covers it well, it can be seen well just at the start of mission 8, dmc3, and end of misson 1, dmc4.
Don't get me wrong, I really like the way you write fanfic plots, I just want it to be a little more dmc type. You can check out The Vergil Chronicles by Gilver, that was the best dmc fanfic I've read. And for dmc action, you can check Dmc: End of the Line by Sin Oan. |