Nice story.

very well written, i love the way you pull the reader in to the story by repeating the wordd 'you' ! i would love for you to continue this, i think it has potential. as you could extend it further by writing about her next visits (alone) and gradually how they become a couple. i think it would be fabulous!

I LOVE THIS! Great job. I think everyone was really in character, which made this 100 times more enjoyable to read. I would like to see it actually unfold like that! I loved the POV you used. I've never really read many things like that before. It was really interesting, and just amazing. I love it.(This is treschiccx from youtube, btw. I think we've established that already though, haha
But once again, awesome job!)

Really amazing story. Great job.

I think it's very fitting ... I liked their reactions ...

THX

God bless you!

Thara

too cute! keep writing!