OMG! Really good story, though I kinda have no patience on reading the 'sex' parts, it's amazingly well written! I swear, it's probably one of my favs! Poor Dawn, she's really knocked up? D: Please, please, continue to write it, ok?

awesome, i hope u update soon :D x

The lemon in chapter 1 was really well written. Now I can only wonder what Barry's plan is...

dear samia-chan,

i've read all three chapters and i have to say its very interesting. also to give u an idea of ur next chapter how bout saturn and mars plot to betray barry!
no one would see it coming in my oppinion any ways i have to to say that you have alot of talent keep it up!

,Aaron

HI AGAIN again I LUV U! Oh, poor Barry! lol, I could just imagine him in the maid outfit XD Oh, I think Barry should think about the baby...I think, like Dawn brings it up rarely and it seems she isn't scared of the idea XD If I were Barry, I would start thinking about it more, its like he doesn't care one bit! So the couple have o talk about it... at least thats what I think, but again thats your choice, not mine. I really enjoyed this chapter! OH AND WHEN SATURN ASKED I WAS LIKE HAHAHAHA when Barry was like NONE OF YOUR CONCERN! POOR BARY XD Oh this is...quiet long, but again this is fanfiction it goes RIGHT across the page.

Again your story is AWESOME! lol, I SWEAR U NAMED THIS STORY AGAIN XD, I love the name! It's really cute and spicy so far, keep it up!

Okay, so I really do like this story so far, but... the genre you put for it is very misleading... I expect to read something funny but then BAM! Angsty rape hits me like a slap to the face -_-" Don't know if it'll get funny later on (if you'll continue this anyway) but... I just wanted to point that out to you.

Furthermore, I find it extremely ironic how Hikari/Dawn just immediately forgave him, even though he raped her and threatened to rape her again. It was honestly a "what just happened?" moment for me. :D

~Ephemeral.Euphony.

Sque, I LOVE YOU! :D Dark Jun/Barry = smexy lmao xD
very creative story!
keep up the good work mate! :) <3

Dawn makes me laugh here. She gets raped, the guy who raped her comes back for more and at the end she's all harrharr shizz is all cool now that you've apologized now let's go get pizza.

Dark. Very..Dark.. I LOVES IT!

Since Barry is all like "LOLIMMARAPEYOU"

Perfect. Though I love Damion/Jun/Barry, whatever you wanna call him, to death. Dark Damion/Jun/Barry is like, :D

Keep up the amazing work!!

~Hariki

TWO WORDS: LOVE U! I love that you are continueing with the story! It is so awesome and the plot is so good! HA, I wish I was there to see Lucas punch Barry xD

Please pardon me, I could hardly control my laughter at the irony of both situations and dialogue. Erm, I’m greatful for the violence inflicted upon Lucas instead of, ah, other actions. But piece it together if you haven’t already:

Earlier, Lucas slightingly says, “I-I'm n-not going to t-tell you (where Hikari is).” [Squee, I love the strained stammer in his voice. <3]

And, at the turning point of the chapter, Barry remarks that, “This (violent eroticism?) is my way of getting people to talk.” …A statement made even more humorous by the word ‘people,’ which could, of course, go for either gender. XD

“You’re insufferable; a horrible and desperate person, Ms Reviewer,” Lucas muttered, his left hand working at his temple as a headache was brought on. He held his elbow in his right palm, shifting in stance. From behind the reviewer’s desk, Barry and Dawn could do little more than stare in disbelief, feeling an oddly cold sensation run down their spines.

“Fans… is that even an appropriate word for them?” Barry whispered, his breath light against Dawn’s ear.
“Professor Rowan means well,” Lucas added, “Yet… when things like this happen while he’s mysteriously absent is so… ironic. Where would my father be? I do not recollect him saying that he was on leave today. The other aides, too, something is not adding up…” He contemplated, his words becoming low murmurs to himself.

“Just how old are we supposed to be in this, Samia-chan?” Dawn piped in, genuinely curious.

Ah… The story is dark and captivating. It’s pretty unique, too; seeing Barry act this way. You’re very creative to think he’d move up so high as to be the Galactic leader! I have to imagine just how miffed Saturn is with this turn of events. If you plan on going further with this story, that’d be great! It has a lot of potential. <3

PS: Regarding your Profile/Bio, Lucas' Japanese name is Kouki.

YEAH SEQUEL!!

Very nice. Never imagined Damion going evil, but it makes sense now since he wants power and all. It's also sad since he defeated Team Galactic with Dawn. :(

Never would have thought that Daimon would become a bad guy...
Anyways it's a good story.

AH, PLEASE, I NEED A SEQUEL! I WANT TO SEE DAMION GET HURT :D I loved it!