I wandered over here on a lazy post-birthday Sunday, and had a good time. This was rather clever and different.

I might suggest the genre be changed to Fantasy slash Horror... because my general mood reading it was one of intense creepitude. In a good way. I like the angle of the heroine potentially being aligned, more or less, with evil.

At times it was hard to follow... probably would improve on a reread... this is not necessarily a criticism. I've seen some of your stuff before, and you definitely have a very cryptic, mystical style... which is a tricky thing to pull off. My feeling was that the story, in fact, could benefit by being LONGER... your sort of literary vehicle lends itself to being drawn out. And it would give the reader a lengthier period to contemplate the meaning of things.

Anyhow, it's been fun.

"That cactus is walking!
Cracks me up, really does.

Poor, poor Elazul.

This story takes is a development, right enough. It is interesting to see how your style changes over the length of it. *grins
Good luck in your other endeavours!

I love it!

Finished at last eh? Been a long time...I'll look forward to any other of your fics

...Uh I had lil confusion in the first part of the chapter since sometimes I can't tell what the character was trying to say but you write well. It's funny to read the Escad thinks of the Jumi as younger :D and hey, I know I'm sounding very lame here, but would you read my LoM fic too? It'll be nice to have a second opinion

the story-within-a-story thing was fun with all the interruptions...ü
random thought:i love escad!ü

O_O' Something wicked indeed...like the update, need more! :D

Wow, the plot thickens, just like it did in the previous chapter... It's been so long since you've updated, and you have just made my night! And I love how you explained the origins of Athena and Poseidon (hehe, Greek mythology theme here), and what happened in the past and what-not. And Poseidon is just like Athena, intruging and adorable... I eagerly await the next chapter!

Is the Poe guy the Hero? :O Well I'm just glad you have finally updated! Almost a year already I think, lol. You never cease to amaze me. Though sometimes I wish you'll explain more as you switch scenes...-_- hmph. Anyhow I look forward to that explanation next chap, update soon!

"You didn’t notice…" the woman trailed off, but picked up again as the vacant expression worked its way onto her friend’s face, "That he wasn’t wearing any clothes?
O.O *giggles* ACK! I will not think pervy thoughts! *slaps self* Okay... Well, that one little part made me giggle out the sheer humor of it all... Anyway, PLEASE update ASAP! I'm hangin' here! And I'm also interested to seeing just exactly what happened between Escad and Athena... Because I've noticed mentionings of some deal that they had. Daena mentioned it to Elazul in Chapter Six, and Escad in Chapter 11 asked why Athena had betrayed him so I would have to wonder. Escad also seemed to have concerns for her in Chapters Nine and Ten, and even a little bit in Chapter eleven so... Hmm... *ponders
I've rambled, so I'll end it here. Like I've said, PLEASE UPDATE ALREADY!

... you just love the cliffhanger, don't you?

Very well done, I must say. I have been following since chapter 8, but then I'm also one of those lazy people who very rarely leaves review.

I love this fic, and the pause between chapter 10 and 11 had me wondering for a long time if it had fallen into hiatus. I can say I'm very happy to see the 11th chapter pop up.

It is very nice, per se, to see some kind of background to the hero/heroine of the game, since LoM really have nothing on who, what, whyever the main character is. It gives plenty of freedom to the rest of us to make up the story ourselves, and it might be just me not looking closely enough, but backstories are somewhat rarely-focused on in the fics I've found so far, excellent though many of them were.

The story is, in my opinion, very well written. It kept me guessing, most times, and the Opal Jumi is a very nice touch it makes me sympathize. Athena's personality is intriguing and extremely adorable, but maybe that's just me.

Well, what else can I say? I've seen the review and I seen the cries for romance, but I always think that romance, while it is logical that it could blossom one time or another in whatever situation, could be left out sometimes. But this is just my personal opinion, and what you decide to do, of course, is up to your discretion, whichever way romance or no romance your fiction goes, I think I will be sticking to read it until the end unless, (I extremely hope god forbid, but that's blasphemy) you loses interest in the story and decides not to finish, and if that happen I'd cry, but this shouldn't affect your decision either.

On the other hand, GO LARC! Yay! I extremely loves how he jumps in. And while I'm uncertain whether "pleaful" is a word, it works.(big grin) Well, I'm certain you're tired of me now, so, I'll get off now. Keep up the good work.

wowwee, that was fully unexpected, Larc is like, too animalistic for moi taste. (wotever right? :p)
Hope you continue soon!

*grins like a mad loony* YAY! You updated! _ Real cool chapter Ovo, I'm likin' it! Things are starting to get very interesting at this point, especially with Escad-sama... I wonder what's going to happen next? Didn't think that Larc would kill that baddies in such a brutal manner- ripping them apart like that. Ouch, don't mess with the wolf-man! *Ahem* Anyway, I hope you keep up the good work. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.-Cheetah

Wow, an update! Heehee! Escad's got a lot of screen time on this chapter, and I was waiting it..heh. anyway, good job. Write more, it's worth the wait!

Hey, an update! _ Nice one! I mean the chapter... Keep it going ne?"Here me always waiting*prances around saying this in a singsong voice*doing this just to annoy the heck outta ya so ya'll go on real quick"Here me always waiting"Here me always waiting"Here me always waiting"Here me always waiting"Here me always waiting"
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