This is a really good short story, the description is briliant. I like the way you you got into the Pokemon's head and showed all of its feelings. You are definitely one of the best authors whose work I have read.

This was a nice story, and I look forward to others like it. It's got a nice sound to it, and your descriptions are wonderful. I don't think I saw anything wrong with it, and Suicune was nicely done.
Lookin' more from you!
-Banzai

Don't over-describe. PLEASE.

Pretty. Portrays the Lengendaries in a new light. You're great at describing things, you can really see the scene. Write on!

^_^ Excellent portrayal of Suicine. Well done!

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okies, this one was REALLY good, the imagary was AWESOME, and the descrptions were terrific, i could actually see the whole suicune sceene infront of me, so really good job with that.

There's not anything really i would say to improve, just an overall good job!!!!! keep up the good work!

That was pretty cool. :)




Good job! Some people certainly do not write well, but man, you're not one of them.

~Cooler

This is tremendous. Your phrasing in describing how it moves, shifts forms, dances... shares a contageous mood of effortless power. you are skilled.

That was a cool story...umm...yup... so...yeah....umm...

Description: Beautiful
Plot: Beautiful
Pokemon: Beautiful
Story: BEE-U-TEE-FUL!!

This is cool - do you know just how much I love the legendaries?

Nice description.
My little brother likes the point of view