cute go on!

good go on!

good go on!

I really like the story and hope you will update again soon!

fun go on!

Yey! I love how this is going! I love how Alex just invites herself onto the team XD.

I love it!

I don't want to seem mean, but I've got a few points to make: 1. your style is good, 2. your grammar needs a lot of work, you keep changing tenses within sentances, and missing out words that need to be there. I'd suggest getting a book on grammar but that might be a bit long and teadious. Try just reading over what you've written carefully in your head, and think about whether the words make sense or not. Examples"but when I was going to the library, he blocks MY way" should be"but when I was going to the library, he blocked MY way
and "the room must be clean by the time I come back that will be all for today" needs a semi colon, "the room must be clean by the time I come back; that will be all for today
Maybe ask a friend to check over it for u and point out the mistakes? Anyway, thanks for the shout out, I'm loving where this is going x

Loving this, it's going everything turns out alright!

This is great so far! I checked the spellings for u: Its Felix Felicis. You spelt petrified correctly, and they were Sopophorous Beans lol not Mongolia rocks XD I checked all these in the book. Keep up the good work xx

Your grammar is really bad. Please, get a beta.

Also, one thing about Alex...

MARY-SUE.

I understand whats going on now lol, I prefer this to your original plot. keep up the good work xx

that was pretty good, how come Draco's being nice all of a sudden? I think it would be better if Alex had done something to make him change his mind, but untill now he was furious and insulting her all the time. Just a thought, keep up the good work xx

well, this story is getting betterer and betterer.

Lol. Cant wait to see which house she'll get put in.

I want her to go in with Sytherin (SP?) because then she'll be with Draco. But then again it'd be good for her to go with the golden trio because she's get more of the action.

Such a hard decision.

Good Luck
xx

I like how this is going so far keep it up xx