That's it, you're just not going to tell us what it is? Doesn't really matter, whatever this weapon is its going to be big, round, and have the power to blow up a planet! Anyway, I hope next chapter will see Sam and Alex getting a crash course on the new MJOLNIR armor, because realstically neither of them have actually worn any variant of it. And here's another free tip for next chapter: Long-Range Stealth Insertion Pods.

This definitely reminds me a lot of Modern Warfare 2 lol. Especially the last part lol. Keep it up ;D

Wow. This Prologue was great, the grammer and english was all correct (something quite refreshing after reading all those terrible fan fictions with the awful grammer and writing.) It caught my attention and brought me into the story, if I hadn't known this was a fan-fiction I would have thought I was reading something by a professional author. The action was realistic and entertaining and everything was very well written. Good job, I'm looking foward to reading more

Another perfectly executed battle, well done.

really good action, great work on all your chapters so far, Nothing has ever really been wrong at all, so great work on this story, and good job on creating suspense at the end with the your on your own statement. Keep it up.

Another superb chapter. Since you seem to be incorperating my review points, I'll give you another little factoid. While space defences and stations take time to build, ground ones don't. There should hopefully be a signifigant military presence (troops, armor, air support) in addition to the Marine Expeditionary Force and their resources. Since this is also a military hub, we're talking underground stockpiles of munitions just itchin to be fired. The rebels clearly want the planet, so they're gonna have to fight for it. The UNSC is sitting on a military hub so supplies won't be much of an issue.

The only problem I have is Cote D'Azur being used as the main focus point of the Rebel assault. Obviously you choose this because frankly, its the only damn place any Halo fan knows about on that whole planet. However it seems I must now educate you on nuclear weapons. Cote D'Azur was destroyed by a 30 megaton HAVOK weapon; granted it says inh the book that its a 'clean' weapon, this only extends to fallout in that it won't spread far from the detonation site. Ground zero however is guarenteed to glow in the dark for about 50 years. I know you're thinking "hey, people live in hiroshima", well that's because we hit Hiroshima with a 12 kiloton airbursted weapon. Cote D'Azur however was hit with something 200 times larger, but the most important part is that it was detonated at ground level as opposed to an airburst which is designed mainly to use the force of the explosion. With a groundburst, the radiation from the blast is going straight into the ground, very deep; this is effectivly a scortched earth kind of tatic.

However, there is hope. An easy way to fix this is just to mention that the UNSC mounted a massive cleanup operation. With the levels of technology they have, combined with post war gains and other immediate needs, it would have taken around nine years to clean up and decontaminate everything. Then you can say the remaining two years were spent rebuilding and repopulating the city; there wouldn't be that many people in it, but on the bright side it makes evacuating the civilians before the rebels attack much easier.

Nice space battle but it seriously felt short when compared to your other chapters. More detail would be nice rather than just skipping by three hours.

By the way, your writing is like a novel based on a movie lol. Yeah, it fits everything perfect into a movie ;p. Keep it up.

Sigma Octanus just can't catch a break these days. I'm thinking whatever the Magisterium is after that will allow them to beat the UNSC is there. I mean sure the magic map rock landed in a meteor, that doesn't mean there are other Forerunner goodies already there. In either case it makes sense since that's the main military hub outside of Earth. It can't be that well defended though, I mean eleven years isn't nearly enough time to build it up to the levels Reach had.

Another thing I wanted to touch base on is the use of UNSC vechicles by the Magisterium/Illuminati. I'm guessing their agents in the UNSC stole the plans and brought them back to be duplicated much like what the Soviet Union did to our B-29s, am I right?

Nice writing you got. Definitely got my interest. It made me read your first art before finishing this one. Darn good xD.

Anyway, I noticed a spelling error or two but its no biggy. This chapter just reminds me of WW2 lol.

Write on, I'm waiting for more ;D

Hmm, I'd think by now the fleet would be able to establish an effective blockade. So its interesting that the Rebels would be able to organize a complete retreat yet not have it be detected; unless they have something else up their sleeves. Also, what's up with this Joe Lieberman refrence, the guy's an arrogant prick and doesn't derve refrence in your awesome fic.

Pretty good. And it doesn't take a genius to figure out where the Insurrectionist forces went. Well done.

Although I must ask: Joe Liebermann? I'll assume it's a coincidence.

Huh. No wonder the Director was so dead-set against O'Riley's defection.

Well I can't say I didn't see that coming, question is what is the Director's goals if both factions are just pawns? And I really hope this weapon/ship isn't spherical and has enough power to destroy an entire planet, because that has been done to death. My guess is that its a forerunner ship of some kind. Anyway, I await the next chapter.

phew, its been a while but I'm back. I've finally gotten all caught up and you've done a good job recovering from your story's semi depression. I must say you came up with an excelent explination for the Magistarium, and I can overlook the seperatists using slipspace 120 years before it was even invented. I also must give praise to your scenes focusing on the Marines taking back that main colony. Not that many writers can get large scale battles down that well, and most portray the military as an overly glorified gun club. While in the begining you portrayed the UNSC as such, you've made major improvements, kudos to you.

Unfortunetly my praise only goes so far. In chapter 31 you gave an explination of how the Magistarium came to be. And while I praise the idea as it makes a fully developed seperate human civilization more believeable, the idea of the Frieden and the Koslovics uniting and escaping is unbelievable. I'm not sure if you've studied the ideals of communism and facism in detail like I have, but something like an alliance happening is simply impossible. Puting aside the fact they fought against each other in the interplanetary wars, facists and communists have always been mortal enemies. WWII was started by this clash of ideals in the first place. While it is true that Hitler was allied with Stalin, you must look at how long that alliance lasted, only a couple of years (1939-1941) and this alliance was to help prevent Germany from fighting a two-front war (something that lead to Germany's defeat in WWI). Hitler had long said that Germany's greatest threat was communism, and he always intended to betray Stalin from the very begining. I find it hard to believe that the Frieden and the Koslovics could have even co-existed for the five year journey when Hitler and Stalin couldn't even last two years.

If you want my advice on how to fix it, just say it was only the Frieden who took the colony ship to Nemesis I since the Magistarium seems most like a facist state than a communist one. However something tells me you're just going to sit on this one.

Anyway, update soon!

I could have figured that the Illuminati weren't all good, you've done a great job on this so far, keep at it!

-Tremble wolf