Great update, Breeze!

Maraya certainly is still a very endearing character. I really loved the topic of her blush and how much it showed of her character. That was a really great way to show us another side of her.

I also really enjoy your perspective of the animals. When you write them, there is such an earthy, natural feel that I enjoy very much.

Between the pink of Nelise's blush and the scarlet of Maraya's, I cannot help but think there's a parallel between them and the safe beauty and wild beauty. That entire discussion between Nelise and Peter had fantastic insight and was a great comparison to the differences between Maraya and Nelise and their relationships with Peter.

Great work, Breeze, and I can't wait to read the next! :D

Thank you for updating! Excellent chapter! Happy New Year. x

A wonderful update and worth the waiting!
I love the comparisons of Edmund to an eagle, Peter to a great cat - and of course the - not as flattering as it was meant to be - comparison of Susan to a swan.
Gren and Deeplen and her reflection of their marriage are delightful, I don't think I have read such a wonderful characterization of a mole so far.

I really like this story, i love how you weave the colors into the story so perfectly! keep it up (and dont take 2 months to update please!)

Uh-oh. Oh dear. Nelise is really starting to fall for Peter, isn't she? Poor, blushing Maraya!

I really loved this chapter - the observations about the Foremole (so much love for that character!), the tie then into Maraya's part...I really adore the image of her with the moles, all down to earth and in the earth. One could say that while Nelise might be falling in love with the King of Narnia, Maraya is perhaps slowly falling in love with Narnia itself, and maybe that makes her a better match for Peter. I loved the comparisons to the various animals - the swan! Of course it's horribly vain! - and Peter and Nelise's discussion of beauty. You really have a way with working in dialogue about heavy topics in a light and lovely manner. Good job! I can't wait for more!

Ahh, Breeze, what a delight. It is wonderful to see you update again. This is all so lovely, light, well written, and just a pleasure to be here again. All this blushing pink and scarlet! Oh for guilty conscience! I have to say that I think we begin to see hints here of what it is about Nelise that does not make her so very well suited to Narnia. I do feel a bit for Peter, going through the motions, with a sort weary, ho hum.

I adore the Foremole and his wife and his terrific care with the table arrangements. Oh, the conversation with the very perceptive Queen Susan and the comparison to the Swans was wonderful! I so adore seeing these characteristics put on the good Beasts.

Oh, Lyron, you do not want to hear Maraya's confession! You don't! I rather think that Nelise is going to be very uncomfortable with the "not tame" Beasts of Narnia.

Lovely as always and such a pleasure to see a new chapter.

Yay an update! And such a lovely one at that! I love the animal comparisons, and I completely agree with them. The description of the Cauldron Pool was excellent, I could easily picture it in my mind. Same goes for the blushes. Nice chapter, and update soon! =)

Wow, this is good! Please update soon! And, as you keep writing, PLEASE don't make Nelise be too angry. Other than that, I have no objections to how the story is.

Well, I FINALLY got around to reading this latest chapter, Breeze! I love your characterization of Peter and the fairly light-hearted feeling of this story. Maraya is rightfully nominated for Best OC, btw - she's very unique in her innocence and insecurity. I know you're extremely busy, but I hope you get a chance to update soon!

so freakin good! update i loves this chapter and story! i would love to see what relationship she has with all the siblings now; like is she super awkward or what and i cant wait to see Peter and the elderly couples conversation about this new found attraction! ;) love your writing hurry up and update hehehe srry im so pushy but there arnt very many good Peter/oc i like out there ;)

Wonderful chapter! I am very impressed that you managed to get it together with how busy you have been!!

I enjoyed how below-the-radar the attraction is--and yet it's there. The kiss brought it out in a nice way. I look forward to seeing what results NOW!

As someone who's read your stories for--is it YEARS now??--I can definitely see how your style has grown and improved. You are less wordy but still have the poetic quality to your writing. I'm no writeonkate, but I can definitely see your grammar improving as well. Aw, what a proud beta I am! You don't really need me anymore! *feels useless* ;)

This is a beautifully written chapter. There are so many wonderful layers to your writing.
The first word I thought of when reading this was comfortable. Peter’s love of life away from court duties, and his preference for simple fare was described splendidly.
In contrast it was awesome that you took the time to show Maraya’s longing for a peaceful life, and her nervousness at the court of Narnia.
There was also some wonderful sensual depths to your writing as well, in your descriptions of Maraya’s enjoyment of fruit, and her childhood memories, combined with your foreshadowing of the relationship to come for her and Peter.
Also I enjoyed the humor you wove into this chapter, Peter and Maraya’s meeting in the royal kitchens, their surprise was hilarious!
Also you had them venturing into some very interesting conversation topics, I hope to see them share and learn more from each other as this story unfolds.
Excellent job.

I've just read the five chapters of this tory so far and i love it =D I reaaly like how you portray Peter and Maraya is alo a very realtable character! I am really enjoying reading this and i can't wait to see what happens in chapters to come. =)

Thank you for updating! I loved this chapter, and I think the raspberry symbolism was really good, as was how she saw it. Hope for an update soon x

You write Maraya so endearly, I love her! Aww... that kiss was so sweet... but poor Peter, what must he be thinking! Good chapter, and update soon! =)