Hilarious!

Beautiful... beautiful.

*applauds*

Poor Marshall. ;)

Very cute!

too cute...lol

thanks

I was very confused till I got to the end, then I could not stop laughing.

-Kate

Hahaha epicness...I love it.

Ok that was an unexpected totally amazingful ending! If only they could put this in an episode :D

This was so not what I was expecting, i loved it.

AHAHAHHA... that was AMAZING. ] You're brilliant, and this was a very, very delightful piece of travesty. Bravo, bravo! You should totally write more! :D

I loved it!

BTW I used to live in Liberal! lol

Wow! This was great! It was very clever, funny, and Marshall is completely in character. I really like the build up to finding out what's going on.

Oh, and this part had me in stitches!

"But now Marshall knew the truth about their Office Administrator. And the truth was more scary than anything Mary had imagined.

And now it was down to Marshall to kill her.

For he alone knew the truth.

Eleanor was Satan."

Awesome job! ]

So great! You've got perfect pacing for gradually revealing what's going on. I especially like the bit about calling Mary.

(Typos:

breath s/b breathe

so not s/b so as not

period missing after mind

wondering s/b wandering

passed s/b past

fall out s/b fallout

Yes, I do a lot of copy editing.)

I enjoyed this a lot. Marshall felt true to character - I could easily envision him shifting between mortal terror and unthinking affection.

OMG this was a great story. Marshall's voice was spot on.

He'd been awake just twenty minutes and he was already prepared to reveal the locations of several of his witnesses. Only the annoying ones of course, but still...

LOVE!