  Kohta
2009-11-26 . chapter 1 okay, so I've only had a chance to read the first chapt. but here's what I can see from what I read.
I might add another review after I finish reading... if I'm not too lazy-feeling.
the story is great.
humor, foreshadowing, the fact that his sister uses him as a dress-up doll... xD
my only issue is one paragraph that I think needs to be reworded.
“No but something else. No one who could see them knew who or what they were. But at night, it would be of no surprise if one of these beings saved a person's life from the evil ghosts and other beings that ruled when the sun fell below the horizon. Before the saved person could express their thanks, they would disappear into the wind, leaving no evidence of ever being there.”
I like how it foreshadows how Danny will become pretty much exactly what is described, but it seems to me to be too straightforeword. however, this could just be my personal preference xD
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