THis is not a flame just a little constructive criticism.

Did you know Katie Gardner is a daughter of Demeter, not Aphrodite?

Yep.

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Percy: Shes breaking up with me! Wah, Nooooooooooooooooooooooooooo oooooooooooooooooooooooooooo oooooooooooooooooooooooooooo oooo
Annabeth: Sheesh, I just had a dream. *facepalm*
Percy: Oh. umm, eheh... So a dream?

Katie garner is a daughter of Demeter

I love Evanescence! Along with paramore, the days grace and W eAre the Fallen. Of course half of the original Evanescence is we are the fallen

I love all ur stories

Amazing
U should try get books published

"he had a soft voice to accompany the genital sounds he created". ermmm was tha meant to say gentle? i tried so had not to laugh cus my family give me weird looks. great fanfic though. one of my favoruites :P

I luv yu

Yeah i totally agree Evanescence is my Fav band and people think i'm emo coz i like their can i say i'm not anyway i'm new to this story sorry but i love it

sorry it's kinda short the review but the fafic's awesome!

Are you kiddin' me! I was gonna cry at the end!

WHOOOOO GO Thalico thank you for putting this in there and thanks you made them exactly how i pictured them together

I hate Lyle sooooooooo much!

You better end this with a happy ending or you'll NEVER hear the end of it from me!

but i like the jealously part

hmmmm...make Brennion see Lyle kiss Kiley forcibly

cuz then Lyle will definitely get what he deserves

heeheehee i know i know im evil :)

I love the story. I have one problem. When the kids go back to their own time it doesn't work. They would have to kill a version of Lyle that hasn't killed Percy and Annabeth for them to keep living in a universe when it never happened. Also, if Percy and Annabeth never got killed then the kids would never be able to go to Percy and Annabeth's time because there would be no reason to. Then they never would've killed Lyle and then Percy and Annabeth would have died again. And it would be a paradox where the universe is doing two timelines at once. Kind of a nitpick but still pretty important to the story. A quote from my favorite show Doctor Who "You think of time as a line but I think of it as a sphere of timey... wimey... stuff." Which explains that instead of a line it should be more like a sphere where if time travel were possible you could hop from one spot to another. Does that make sense?

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Bstras

OMG loved the story i laughed screamed cried and almost died while reading this story (i know im an emotional wreck) but i still loved it but i had read Growing Up Together before i read this so panic attacks when i reconized a character were very frequent. Love youre writing keep it up!