oohh... interesting. I like this story.

Interesting.

Hm... I get the feeling that it won't end so simply for Hellsing...

That, and it's generally due to Lucy's third personality (kill everything-san) that they have the urge to kill in the first place. And I do believe she was dead at the end of the manga, so Diclonius' lost their urge to kill (and ability to reproduce).

Just like before...simply amazing!

i have two words to say about this story...

pure genius!

Even if the ending is with her dying (dying is a bit of a week ending in books) its just pure brilliant the start espeically!

That was simply...AMAZING! I was captivated from beginning to end. The diction was impeccable, everything flowed wonderfully, and the story itself seemed well thought out and contained a nice and even pacing. Seriously, I am so awestruck by this that I am at a loss for words.

This was so unbelievably interesting...you should consider doing something with this. Seeing as to how this has a clear conclusion, maybe something with a similar premise then.

You should continue this if at all possible. I daresay Alucard would find the Diclonius situation amusing...and Millenium would try to take advantage of it as well...

Interesting story. Very well written, nice details, but the only thing I need to point out is the style. Most reader turn away from first person stories, you attract more people if you had written it in third person. There is always an exception to the rule if the plot is good enough, which is was. Another problem is when I finished it it just seemed short like there should have been more, like getting to know Eve a bit more.

Ok sorry for the long review, and please don't take this as a flame. You are a talented writer and I wish you the best.