|Reviews for Brotherly Love|
| IlovetowriteSMP 8/3/09 . chapter 1
I like your writing style. By that I mean the way you string sentences together- the sound of those sentences.
I think you could have made this a lot longer by showing and not telling what happened. Show Dante in jail. Show the confrontation with Sonny. Or show a Lulu and Dante good bye. Something to get a scene in the story and not just a summary.
Still I do think the idea of Lucky and Ethan uncovering Dante's true identity is a good one.