This was an awesome story, seeing these two characters together makes me grin like a cheshire. Jack would totally be able to bet Jim for ego, though. He's got centries more experiance after all ^_^

However, you have a LOT of grammar mistakes in your story. It's actually got me wondering if English isn't your first langage? I only wonder because you've got several places were you've simply used the wrong word. (and if it isn't, can I say you did a really good job?)

For example, you wrote: “Is this sit taken?”
when it should read: "Is this seat taken?"

and as the shake hands
Should read: and as they shake hands

He looks around as the waiter's pincer points towards whoever it was who sent the drink - as a captain he oughts to be careful, and Bones would really have his ** if he gets poisoned because he accepted a drink from a leggy humanoid, for not mentioning that Spock and Uhura will be all 'Told You So' and, really, there's nothing quite like a Vulcan equivalent of Told You So to feel like two inches tall.

Should read: He looks around as the waiter's pincer points toward whoever sent the drink -- as a captain he ought to be careful -- Bones would really have his ** if he got poisoned because he accepeted a drink from a leggy humanoid. And that wasn't even mentioning that Spock and Uhura would be all told-you-so and, really, there's nothing quite like the Vulcan equivalent of told-you-so to make a person feel two inches tall.

and I have no idea what this following sentense is suppose to say:
James grins, and he can bet the face that McCoy must be doing as he looks at him.

He can bet the face that McCoy must be doing? What does that even mean?

anyway, I really did enjoy this story, I think your idea for the pairing was awesome! cheers!

Ha - I love this concept, and the disjointedness of the whole story. The short description of what Kirk sees in Jack's eyes was beautiful, and the short imput of backstory was really clever. T'was a great read.
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OMG...that's brilliant. Cause they totally do have the same sorta ego, and I never realized it. Now all you would have to do is throw the other Time Agent (the one Spike played) from Torchwood in here, and we'd REALLY have a party.

Love it! Your style was great, the plot was succinct, moving, and entertaining, and the ending was great.

Love it! ^^

Cute premise with a dash of Jack angst. Thanks for sharing.

oh that is just MEAN! think of the fun you could hsve!
i mean, come ON!! i want to see a contiuation here!XD

haha XD this is great, I love the bit about the ego

The best way to leave us is to leave us wanting more ;-) Brilliantly done and honestly, a perfect place to stop and let the imaginations of the readers take over.

Just so you're aware, you say this story is written in Danish.

Ahahah Harkirk.. the team that really would take over the universe.. I think Uhura might just keep over in shock lol

Cute and funny.