that was beautiful. this was written beautifully and you must have quite a talent if you wrote this! i'm excited to read more of your work. great, great story, this one!

aw. Really sad! Well done

Perfect, change nothing.

Kalina

I thiought this was good. I liked how you interspersed the song with the story.

Two small corrections: It should be "laid", not "layed" in the places where you have that. And I think you meant to say that Fred's life had been "extinguished" rather than "distinguished".

Hope you write more!