Ahh! I was almost too afraid to read this chapter after the previous one. I guessed something like this was about to happen. Thats something I dread for Bill, what will happen when/if he loses Sookie forever. The last line from Bill was heart-wrenching.
Anyway, a great story. Thanks.

I liked it. I feel like I would have liked if more, if I'd ever seen the show XD I think it's interesting and I think the poems work well. Basically, I like it and I'm tired ><

You capture Bill's struggle so well. Bill's lack of trust in Sookie is justified I must say, he loves her and does not want to lose her comes out beautifully even in those moments of distrust. And she can be quite an airhead *cough-episode1.11 Sam snogging-cough*. BTW I loved how you punctuated the Bill/Sookie dialogue with Bill's thoughts. Awesome!

Dialogue between Sophie-Ann and Lorena had me LOLing for some weird reason, and the verbal smack from the Queen at the end made me ROFLMAO. Don't take it wrong, its very well written. May be it was just the Crazy Frog effect as I was listening to the latest album from 'The Most Annoying Thing'. Hee!

Write more, and soon!

Great story. You have really captured Bill's struggle. Intelligent and well written. More, please!

Uh, Lorena is gonna be big trouble in my beloved couple's life, isn't she? She is so obsessed with getting Bill back, though I can't blame her. I am just as obsessed with him too, that man is worth obsessing over. BTW, nice twist with Queen being Lorena's maker. Can't wait to see where you go next with this.

P.S.: 'As your Progeny, I banish you." - Oh, snap! Go Bill! :D

...and THAT is why I love vampires. References to helping write the poem, and to just casually drop the 'involvement in the Second World War...'
Adoration is heaped.

Not only do I love how something so simple continues to enthrall me, but your use of vocabulary and your style of writing keeps me coming back for me! I really hope you continue this. Your grasp on emotions that aren't expressly explained is amazing, and I hope to read more!

Well, duh! The name says it all, right? :D

Please continue. I would love to read more- more of both Bill/Lorena and Bill/Sookie. I just love Bill/Sookie together. With all their differences, they are still made for each other. And I just love the way you write Bill. Bill is my fav character on TB, just love him and the way Stephen Moyer portrays him is amazing. So, its really good to see a good Bill/Sookie story.

Keep writing.

Loving this story. You capture Bill's internal struggle perfectly. Awesome job!

I love the way you write. Brilliant! You have an amazing way of showing the the internal struggle of Bill- the gentleman trying to tame the beast that lurks inside in hopes of latching onto some remnants of his former humanity. The stark contrast between his enthrallment with Lorena and his love for Sookie is so beautiful. Needless to say I want Bill/Sookie love to win. :D
Keep writing.

Make it a eric/sookie story. have bill go nuts or soemthing and go back to lorena

i think this should end up being a lorena/bill
and a eric/sookie story.

its really good tho

Loving this! You have got Bill and Lorena's voices down pat. It would be great to see some more of this from you.

P.S.: I tried to review before but I guess there was some problem with . It also wouldn't let me upload a new chapter for my story.