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narusaku dramione
2009-12-03 . chapter 3
I like your story so far, it's very good. So please update soon.
Thanks !
Really Cinderella
2009-11-04 . chapter 3
Great start so far! Is it Draco maybe?
SnowCharms
2009-11-04 . chapter 3
I'm surprised that Hermione would be so stunned that she is unable to react, since her adventures with Harry and Ron should have done something to sharpen her reflexes. Update!
HogwartsBum64
2009-11-03 . chapter 3
OMG!
FINALLY
NEW CHAPTER
-HAS BEEN WAITING FOREVER-
tahnk you
SnowCharms
2009-10-18 . chapter 2
They're really going to get into trouble, especially if the DA members are there. Update!
Redstar03
2009-08-27 . chapter 2
I like this idea, death eaters attacking in the daylight. A nice twist. Good job and update soon!
voldyismyfather
2009-08-16 . chapter 2
i love it
Isabella120
2009-08-15 . chapter 2
awesome job!
PLEASE UPDATE SOON!
~Bells
Hamelia Le Claire
2009-08-14 . chapter 2
I am getting excited! Thank you so much for updating! :D
septasonicxx
2009-08-14 . chapter 2
AH

OHMYGOSH OHMYGOSH OHMYGOSH

WHAT HAPPENS NEXT!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?

AWESOME CHAPTER I LOVE IT TO DEATH!
Emilia Gray
2009-08-11 . chapter 1
this was quite good!
I look forward to more.
DevilishBea-Anime-Couple-Lover
2009-08-11 . chapter 1
THAT WAS AWESOME!! I love this couple SO much! plz keep up with the work -thumbs up-
Isabella120
2009-08-11 . chapter 1
awesome job! This sounds really good, and i'd like to see where this goes cuz there is so much you could do!
~Tess
Lild
2009-08-10 . chapter 1
I completely forgot! I agree with you about Draco NOT having the Dark Mark. Have you seen the movie HBP? -shudder- the ending was so terrible. ugh.

And I like your choice of title. A Million Jagged Edges seems very melodramatic, and I think I've seen it somewhere before in a fanfic ... Into the Vanishing Cabinet seems much more unique and eye-catching, which is good for a title.

Hooray double reviews?
-Lild
Lildaani
2009-08-10 . chapter 1
Hey Elf! Good to see you writing Dramione again.

Very intriguing start; I can't wait to read more of this. I really do like the way you write. It's very descriptive and I never have trouble envisioning the scenes you create.

I've been beta'ing a friend's work recently, so it's sort of been ingrained in me to note grammar/spelling mistakes now.

I did notice a few errors ... mostly small things like a missing comma, words being capitalized that shouldn't be, a couple typos. And, er, ginny pigs? The word you want is guinea.

The typos I noticed:

He looked up, undoubtedly surprised, yet his stunned gaze fell sharply away until his face mirrored the most calculated degree of rage Hermione could possibly imagined.

Not entirely sure what direction you want to go in here, but it should either be 'Hermione could possibly imagine' or 'Hermione could have possibly imagined.' (or 'could possibly have imagined.' I guess.)

Gently, more gently then Malfoy should have been allowed, she pressed the tip of her wand to the lower point of the wound.

Again, not sure what you want here. 'more gently than Malfoy should have allowed' or 'more gently than should have been allowed.' (also note that it's 'than' not 'then.')

She drew a shuttering breath, pointing the tip of her want at Malfoy’s damaged arm.

You wrote 'want' instead of 'wand.'

"You affinity for knowledge must baffle them."

'You' instead of 'your.'

Er, yeah. So, if you're interested in the commas and capitalization, I can PM you with those, I just don't want to overwhelm you with corrections. Your writing is really very good! And if you want me to bugger off with my beta'ing, I can do that too, no problem. lol.

-Lild
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